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0 posted 2000-12-03 05:43 PM



It's amazing how love embraces your heart
no matter how far you are.
That brings two people together
be it near, or from afar.

Intertwining, two souls combining
melding into each other like tar.
Making a love that shines forever,
outlasting even the stars.



-"!!!"


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IsGona
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1 posted 2000-12-03 05:54 PM


Great depiction of love.  and congrats on your 100th post.  hope to see many more

"Every body has their destiny...
I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN
~Hatebreed~

!!!
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2 posted 2000-12-03 06:41 PM


Thanx, IsGona, for takin time out to read my poem, and to congratulate me on my big 100. I hope to post many more poems as well!
Dopey Dope
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3 posted 2000-12-03 11:00 PM


This was a great 100th post and i hope you get to 200 faster!
Anyway i like the message in this poem. The intertwining fact of it all was great.
keep posting!



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!


Lakewalker
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4 posted 2000-12-04 03:42 PM


I think you did a relly good job here!  I really like this line:

"Intertwining, two souls combining"


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curlygurly
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5 posted 2000-12-04 03:58 PM


Great poem! i really loved the way you described love! awesome job!  
Curly

!!!
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6 posted 2000-12-05 08:30 PM


DOPEY: Thanx for the congrats on my big 100. And hopefully i will get to 200 a little bit faster.

LAKEWALKER: Thanx, ive been getting a couple of comments about that "Intertwining, 2 souls combining" line.

CURLYGURLY: Thanx for the response, and im DOUBLY-glad that you enjoyed how i described love.

Thank you ALL for your responses, hope to hear from yall soon. Later!  

Jose Marti
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7 posted 2000-12-06 12:09 PM


Great poem I liked it a lot
It's better than a lot of what I've been writing lately

Erin
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8 posted 2000-12-06 12:21 PM


Congratulations on your 100th post!!! I hope to see you posting more making a faster way to 200.

Good poem.

Making a love that shines forever,
outlasting even the stars.

Good choice of words. Keep it up!!!


People leave our lives as quickly as they come, but the ones that mean something leave footprints in our hearts.

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9 posted 2000-12-06 08:41 PM


This was great!! Short and sweet   I liked it a lot!!!

This was the best part:"Making a love that shines forever,
outlasting even the stars."

!!!
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since 2000-08-12
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10 posted 2000-12-06 10:11 PM


JoseMarti: Im glad you like the poem. Of course, I havent been on here in a while, so ive had plenty of time to think about what to post.

Erin: Thank you for the best wishes, Erin. Like i said to dopey dope, i hope to get to 200 a little faster myself, but hey, as long as i get there, y'know...
Oh, btw, im glad you liked that verse of the poem. It was my favorite one to write  

SugarHigh: Thanks for takin time out to read my poem. Im glad that you, also liked that last verse i wrote. It took some time to think it up, but it was well worth it.

Thanx, all of yall, for readin, and responding, and ill catch you all later!
   smiles to all!!  


vlraynes
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since 2000-07-25
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11 posted 2000-12-06 10:19 PM



!!!-
   WOW!!  
   this is really beautifully done...
   you have a wonderful talent...keep
   up the good work..

   *smiles*,
   ~vicky




"...until you have read the verse on his
heart, you have not truely met the poet."
-vlraynes



!!!
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since 2000-08-12
Posts 137
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12 posted 2000-12-07 12:36 PM


Thanx a LOT for the response, Vicki! It is VERY much appriciated   And as for keepin up the good work, dont worry, ill try...
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