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peanogrl83 Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 202 |
More new styles, but still disgustingly bad. Vreni Silent Scream S hivering now, you cough and squint I mbibed in lies, the hollow newsprint. L ife, the struggle, above you towers E ntertains the sand, counts the hours. N aught a soul that can extend a hand T ow you ashore, towards sober land. S arcasm sweet, dripping with honey C oated with hate, love of money. R eward for your false deeds well done E maciated memories of forgotten sun. A doration of bland, normal routine M akes not a human, but machine. [This message has been edited by peanogrl83 (edited 12-03-2000).] |
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FlipAngel Junior Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 46Prior Lake, MN, USA |
This is a wonderfully written, detailed poem. I loved it! ~*Yesterday is gone, let go of the past; tommorrow will bring new hope to grasp*~ |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
You are either very humble or seriously unaware of your talent. This is a great poem. IsGona "Every body has their destiny... I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN ~Hatebreed~ |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
OK this is getting quite rediculous! THis is so damn amazing! THE BEST acrostic I've ever read! Not only did you go along with started every word with the designed two words of the acrostic, but you ryhmed as well......This was simply amazing!! I loved this very much and i urge you to keep on expiramenting, while not forgetting your previous style. You can always go back to it.....mua mua! Much love vreni!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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B@BYG!RL Junior Member
since 2000-11-30
Posts 19Australia |
Fab acrostic!! You are very talented like the guys before me have already said! Keep 'em coming! ~Dianne Don't frown, because you never know who's falling in love with your smile. |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Wow, beats all the acrostics I've tried...this was very, very good. ~Carly |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Excellent job on this, you are very good at writing. "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
peanogrl- wow...I have read several different poems from you, in varying styles, and I just have to tell you how impressed I've been with every one of them.  You have an incredible talent that shines through, no matter what style you choose...keep up the awesome work!! *smiles*, ~vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truely met the poet." -vlraynes |
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peanogrl83 Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 202 |
I appreciate all your replies and compliments. (though I find them unfounded... :.P ) And of course, as always, thanks Dopey. Don't worry, my old style is somewhere...I'm just taking a break like you requested. :.) Vreni |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Vreni Vreni Vreni unfounded? You are wrong my dear. Your writing is more like talent undiscovered. And you will as long as you keep writing. I see you know with the likes of E.B.B. or W.S. I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Melster Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 442Brisbane, Qld, Australia |
You should take more credit for your work... it is great!! Good work!! Melz!! Dont believe what ur eyes r telling u they only show limitation. Look with ur understanding, find out what u already know & u will see the way to fly |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
Hey, this is great. I can never understand why you don't like your work, I think it's great. Nice job Bel |
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