Utopia (An Acrostic) ideas would be good

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Utopia (An Acrostic) ideas would be good

hoppy
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since 2000-01-27

Posts 271

0 posted 2000-12-03 12:49 PM

Utopia is what i desire to give!
Our own world of vivid dreams where
Your imagination is the only limit.
Everyone will desire our gift of
Venturing from our fears and living
Outwardly the life we imagine inwardly!
Let us come to a point where we can
Invest our hearts together in a loving trust

-Hoppy
12/3/00

Swift as a shadow, short as any dream;
Brief as the lightning in the collied night,
That in a spleen unfolds both heaven and earth,
And ere a ma

Child of the Stars

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since 2000-09-07

Posts 1658
Ann Arbor, MI

1 posted 2000-12-03 12:56 PM

I really liked the way this one was written. It's not like the acrostics we've steryotyped into existance, and I like that. Great job.

~Carly

Home is where the heart goes when it needs a band-aid.

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

2 posted 2000-12-03 04:26 PM

The acrostic confused me at first but then I realized that it said "I love you" starting from the bottom. Hehe anyway I thought it was great!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!

hoppy
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since 2000-01-27

Posts 271

3 posted 2000-12-04 12:58 PM

thanks for the couple replies.....i'm fiddling with different kinds of poem lay outs lately so you'll have to bare with me till i find something good

Swift as a shadow, short as any dream;
Brief as the lightning in the collied night,
That in a spleen unfolds both heaven and earth,
And ere a ma

Lakewalker
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since 2000-08-05

Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people

4 posted 2000-12-06 03:50 PM

I have to tell you I was lost on this one until I read Dopey's reply. I like it, it's creative and I think you did well with it!

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker
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