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Loss of Hearty Home
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Loss of Hearty Home |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico 
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NOTE: Symbolic Warning!!!! This poem contains immense amounts of symbolism within my own personal experiences. Each line means something in it's own sense......if you don't or can't delve within it...just try and get the over-all feeling and tone of the poem. Thanks! Loss of Hearty Home: Dirty dust crossroad cause confusion. Double mirror of dillusion. Finger tip lust and childhood laughter. It's what you forgot, and what I'm after. Kiss lost within forgetful waters. Mother Nature is what I taught her. Tortured memories of heart break day. Clotted blood cells that forever stay. Clock work ticking seems to pass by. Missing lover is reason to cry. Misplaced future to forever roam. It's all that I miss, It's all that was home.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
hmmm... can't completely put my finger on all the lines here. There is a definate feel of loss. Seems like there was a huricane or something.. not sure whats what though with the symbolism. I will have to read this again when I'm not so tired. much enjoyed though. IsGoan "Every body has their destiny... I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN ~Hatebreed~ |
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sweetstuff101 Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 375OK, USA |
that was good. I'm not really sure what it means...maybe cuz I'm tired and don't feel like thinking about it...but it is still good. I liked it. keep writing!! Much Luv, ~*~Priscilla~*~ ~*~GoOd fRiEnDz ArE hArD 2 FiNd, HaRdEr 2 LeAvE, & iMpOsSiBlE 2 fOrGeT~*~tHe HaRdEsT tHiNg tO Do iS wAtCh tHe 1 U LuV, lUv sUm1 eLsE~*~ |
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kimmy Member
since 2000-07-31
Posts 98 |
to me it seems like u feel like u have lost a friend or a close family member or something...im not sure though..but i liked the poem... |
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Suga_Baby Member
since 2000-08-06
Posts 380Maine, USA |
This is a little bit too deep for my tired, blond mind, but I liked it very much! You rock my world, Dopey!!  |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Thanks for the warning, sheesh, that was hard, but I did find a meaning in it  "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
Javier, wow!I really,damn this was amazing!it had a feeling....it was an over load...the warning...i dont know Keep it up! Regina |
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Dean Member
since 1999-11-23
Posts 120Canada |
Excellent poem! Awesome job! I loved it I hope to read more from you! "Live to love or why live at all" Deano :) |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Thanks everybody for the comments on this poem. Basic meaning: is that some stuff happened that i wish didn't....and id wish that i could have stayed back on track, in my home..but my home being a state of mind. Anyway all the symbolism have their own meanings but i wouldnt wanna get into that unless asked. thanks! I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Allysa 
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
Dopey: great! Love ya! But I gotta go before my sister has a heart attack! I can't see at all. Even if I could it would all be great, to put your picture on my wall, it reminds me that it's not so bad, it's not so bad. |
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Hallie_Angel Member
since 2000-12-06
Posts 102 |
Hey, Good-JOb on your poem. It confused me at first but now I think(Keyword think) I might understand. Allysa is my friend and from school and told me about you and how your poetry is awesome, well it is. Keep writing and singing the words from your heart.Have a good day! Catherine! |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
Well I thaught someone else would ask... I was wrong. Guess if I want to know I have to ask my self... What does it all mean?.. I'm curious. IsGona "Every body has their destiny... I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN ~Hatebreed~ |
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Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
*bump* I wanna know what it means too!!! I love you Dopey! Don't you forget that!!! I can't see at all. Even if I could it would all be great, to put your picture on my wall, it reminds me that it's not so bad, it's not so bad. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
OK.....i'm not quite sure how i'm going to start this so i'll just wing it. The title is obviously sad. It's implying that I lost something. This something being a hearty home, a home with much love to be given and received back. - Ok now I think i'll just do this by verse- STANZA I Dirty dust crossroad cause confusion.= The crossroad symbolizes A place to make a decision and i'm on confusion on which way to go. The dirty dust part symbolizes how the state of my mind is, hazy. I know not of where to go or what to do. Double mirror of dillusion.= The Double mirror symbolizes the two-faced way that things usually tend to be. Hate/love, ect... The dillusion once again states my state of mind, but this time dillusional. What I was trying to do was show the reader how undecided, screwed up, and hazy my mind was. Finger tip lust and childhood laughter.= Finger tip lust symbolizes just lust in general. The finer tip part means like.....when you're lusting for somebody or having sex you touch them with your finger tips. I should think a soft touch of the finger tips would be very personal and loving, but only when in love..and lust is just NOT love, thus deceiting to the eye. This portrays something i HATE.Childhood laughter would portray something i MISS. The innocence and memories past of what was true and honest. It's what you forgot, and what I'm after.= This is pretty obvious. I'm referring so somebody. I'm saying that she forgot this....all this, while i'm after it. Not all the bad stuff but the innocence and truth. STANZA II Kiss lost within forgetful waters.= This is saying how a kiss was lost. This implies that the love was lost within a sea of nothing, or forgetful waters. Same thing. Mother Nature is what I taught her.= This has more of a personal note to it. Nothing deep. I always taught my X about nature and how to be kind to it and let EVERYTHING live. I do not kill ANYTHING on purpose. NOTHING!....so I taught her about Mother Nature. Just a little something sweet to add in displaying what I did for her, and what I shared with her. Tortured memories of heart break day.= Now im heading back into the bad stuff. This is a pretty obvious verse. Bad memories of when I was being hurt by my X Clotted blood cells that forever stay.= I always make Blood cells to be the epitome of passions. The running flow of blood symbolizing the everlasting relationship between body and soul. Blood runs, body lives, soul thrives. Yet, these cells are clotted, and thus I am dying. STANZA III Clock work ticking seems to pass by.= Referring to TIME. Time is passing by as I rot. Missing lover is reason to cry.= Pretty obvious verse. I miss my lover, my X Misplaced future to forever roam.= I always thought I had a future with her and now it's gone, rather said, misplaced....and it's going to forever just roam the lands aimlessly not finding it's way back. It's all that I miss, It's all that was home.= This is me summing everything up. All the good stuff.....the future that is roaming.....everything about that is what I miss. It was my home and now it's been ripped away from me. So sad So sad..... Ok so that's it........hope this helped. I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
Hey, thanx for the explination dopey. It helped. For some reason when I read this I really goofed up the interpritation of the second stanza. Now that I understand your sybolism a little better I really loved the line "Clotted blood cells that forever stay" Keep up the good work. IsGona "Every body has their destiny... I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN ~Hatebreed~ |
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