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Dopey Dope
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0 posted 2000-11-30 08:16 PM


NOTE: This is one of my songs. yep yep

Down and Out:


Are you lost in space?
Eating out the future of all your worth.
So we're down and out,
But that doesn't mean your gone.

We see what we'll never be.
Lost at sea
We see death tranquility.
Crashing down on me.
I flee
From the us, the we.

So you're lost in space?
Running from the past of all that was.
So we're down and out.
Down and out and out.

Nothing x2 is all I got.
Nothing x2 is why I rot.

We see what we'll never be.
Lost at sea
We see death tranquility.
Crashing down on me.
I flee
From the us, the we.

I'm not wasting away.
What a lie, I'd say.
Eating out the future of all i'm worth.
We're down and out,
But i'm gone.







I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!


© Copyright 2000 Pepe de la Muerte - All Rights Reserved
Child of the Stars
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1 posted 2000-11-30 08:30 PM



  .....blew me away..........can't wait to hear this on the radio.....

  ~Carly

Home is where the heart goes when it needs a band-aid.

Rhiannon
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2 posted 2000-11-30 09:22 PM


I liked this one!  You write such sweet responses to my poetry that it's hard to compensate   but i do enjoy reading you.
love
leslie

The night is my companion
The solitude my guide
Would I spend forever here
And not be satisfied?
Sarah MacLachlan, "Possession"


IsGona
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3 posted 2000-12-01 12:47 PM


I'm with the others.  This was great.  This really had a nice rhythm to it.  I like what you are saying in this song too.  As always I look forward to your next post
IsGona

"Every body has their destiny...
I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN
~Hatebreed~

branden726
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4 posted 2000-12-01 06:52 AM


Hey dopey are u in a band? I mean if you took this farther down the road and actually did something about it then you mite be famous someday and i'll be able to say Hey, i know that guy lol i love the poem/song keep up the great work like always

"i just love when you bring your whole crew because its just a bigger piece of cake for me to chew threw"


TearsOfPearls
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5 posted 2000-12-01 04:11 PM


This is very good Dopey, very very good I'd say. You have a real talent. Great rhythm, great style...keep it up  

Planning big can be a gamble...I have already rolled the dice!

Pixie-Babe03
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6 posted 2000-12-02 03:53 PM


great work   i haven;t been in the forum much lately but i love this   talk to ya later
~*Pixie*~

Lakewalker
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7 posted 2000-12-03 11:37 AM


Dopey, hey, this is awesome.  I think it sounds great, you really have a lot of talent.  I'm gonna add this to my library thing.

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker
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peanogrl83
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8 posted 2000-12-03 11:57 AM


Dopey, this was a very fine piece of work here  - it will make an INCREDIBLE song.  Bravo!! :.)

Vreni

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9 posted 2000-12-03 01:22 PM


due to my lack of time to write anything creative and insightful i'll just say....nice job!

Swift as a shadow, short as any dream;
Brief as the lightning in the collied night,
That in a spleen unfolds both heaven and earth,
And ere a ma

Dopey Dope
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10 posted 2000-12-06 06:20 PM


Well thanks everybody. If you all wondered......yes i play guitar and in the process of forming a band. So yea.......most of these songs will come into play.....when?....Probably in 20 billion years when i find a damn drummer!
haha....bye!



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!


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