Teen Poetry #3 |
Forever in a Moment |
CareBear3 Junior Member
since 2000-11-20
Posts 39New Hampshire |
a picture perfect taken a moment stilled in time a night never to be forgotten emotion preserved in mind forgotten through the years turned yellow on the edge stacked away in boxes once lost along the ledge a love promised forever died within a year a desire once uncontrollable lost without a tear a night up in the attic the boxes all unpacked revealed a night to remember piled among the stacks a night full of passion sealed within a flash rekindled an ended love and renewed a love to last a picture perfect taken a moment stilled in mind a night never to be forgotten a love outlasting time "In great moments life seems neither right nor wrong but something greater it seems inevitable" ~Kelley |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I really liked the ending in this one. Keep it up cuz this was great! I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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DreamerGrl27 Member
since 2000-10-29
Posts 142 |
This was really good...I loved it...I loved this part soooooo much: a night full of passion sealed within a flash rekindled an ended love and renewed a love to last Again...this was really really good. |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
It's amazing how one moment can change a person's entire life. It's even more profound when that moment is captured on film. You describe this beautifully. Thanks for sharing. "Where there is great love there are always miracles" -Cather "Love heals everything, and love is all there is"- Zukav |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
This poem was GGGGRRRRRREEEEEAAAAAAATTTTTT!!!!!!!!!!!!! I absolutely loved it!!! Omg it had so much truth in it and it flowed so nicely...i really liked this one a lot!! One of my favs!! Thanks for sharing!!!! |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
CareBear- WOW...this is really good... you have a wonderful talent, and I can't wait to read more from you.. This one is absolutely beautiful.. *smiles*, ~vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truely met the poet." -vlraynes |
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B@BYG!RL Junior Member
since 2000-11-30
Posts 19Australia |
My favorite poem so far! To be able to write like this.. a dream of mine.. Thanx for sharing your poem. ~Dianne |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
CareBear~ How perfect is the moment captured in your rhyme Of a very special photograph lasting through all time Time marches on until the camera commands HALT ! Then time stands still forevermore kept within the heart's vault Commanding memories to come with thoughts so kind when exploring the photographs stored our minds *This was such a lovely and nostalgic look at an exploration in the attic. Lovely, sweet poet. Thanks for the inspiration ! Keep penning these beauties ! *And thank you, Vicky ... you knew I'd like this one ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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curlygurly Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 276USA |
That was so deep! i loved it, it rocks! Curly "So many tears i've cried, so much pain inside" -Lenny Kravitz |
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kcsgrandma Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1522Presque Isle, ME |
I have to thank Vicky, too. This is lovely, very well put together, and shows a lot of wisdom. A lot of what we think is going to be forever really isn't, but then again... you never know, do you? To love another person is to see the face of God. - Les Miserables Marilyn |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I think you did a great job with the flow of this. I really like this poem, it's very good I think I'm going to put it in my private library. nice job "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Ha, that's just like me, I forgot to put it in my library "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Suga_Baby Member
since 2000-08-06
Posts 380Maine, USA |
I like this! great job! |
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CareBear3 Junior Member
since 2000-11-20
Posts 39New Hampshire |
Thank you all for the support! This means so much to me! : ) thanks again! "In great moments life seems neither right nor wrong but something greater it seems inevitable" ~Kelley |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
Can't believe I'm just now reading this one. I would have really missed out on a good poem. Thank you for sharing IsGona "Every body has their destiny... I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN ~Hatebreed~ |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
let me pick my jaw off the floor first before i say anything...... I'm speechless...BRAVO I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Melster Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 442Brisbane, Qld, Australia |
Great Job, I really like this one, you have done such a wonderful job expressing this feeling!! keep up the great work!! Melz!! Dont believe what ur eyes r telling u they only show limitation. Look with ur understanding, find out what u already know & u will see the way to fly |
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