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DreamerGrl27
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0 posted 2000-11-30 06:26 PM



If I Could Take Back One Mistake

I never even realized
How sweet you were to me
I was in my own world
And all of this I didn't see.
I loved you so much
But you didn't love me back
I didn't know what to do
So I tried to attack.
I never saw it through your eyes
I never felt it with your heart
I just assumed you hated me
When you wanted to be apart.
I guess the words "I love you"
Were a little bit too strong
Cause then everything was different
Maybe the timing was all wrong.
After that I apologized
And asked you to forget
But I know you never did
Which is one of my regrets.
If I could take back one mistake
I'd take back just that night
So we wouldn't have to be this way
And everything would be right.  

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CareBear3
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1 posted 2000-11-30 06:32 PM


I know that feeling, when you have emotions and you want to share them, but they are too strong, for the other person.  Im sorry things didnt work out, but this poem is great.  The feeling and voice in it are so strong.  Great job!

"In great moments life seems neither right nor wrong but something greater it seems inevitable"

~Kelley

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2 posted 2000-11-30 06:37 PM


One of the things I regret most in my life is the time I told a girl I loved her while knowing I truly didn't. Why did I do this? I have no idea!  I was 14 and foolish!
Anyway......Here's the deal folks....when you say "i love you" you're not speaking words here......you're describing the most powerful abstract feeling known in existance. You become vulnerable to the person when you say it. Sometimes you honestly and truly feel it but timing is a key deal here. If you blurt it out without realizing it.......you're in over your heads. If you say it to a person that doesn't feel it back, then you're in trouble and will face the wrath of unrequited love (aka TORTURE). All in all, use those 3 words wisely.

Good look with you!



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3 posted 2000-11-30 10:16 PM


Awwww trace....wouldnt it be great if we could go back to the pass and fix all of our mistakes?? I'd love that and i know that you shur as hell would to..but try to think of it this way...everything happens for a reason hun..He doesnt deserve you, your an amazing person and an awesome friend and he should see that in you...dont worry hun... Love ya!!
Lovely_Kris
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4 posted 2000-12-01 11:45 AM


I think your poem was great. There is so many things i would like to take back but i don't think i can. Keep up the great work and hope to read more.
Lovely_Kris


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5 posted 2000-12-01 09:38 PM


We all make mistakes in love. We all do things that we regret, but all we can do is learn from it and try to move on. Thanks for sharing.

"Where there is great love there are always miracles" -Cather
"Love heals everything, and love is all there is"- Zukav



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6 posted 2000-12-03 11:03 AM


I think LoveBug said it all: "all we can do is learn from it".  We all have those awful moments we wish we could erase!  You just have to learn what you can from the experience and try not to repeat it.  Anyway, nice job on the poem

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AngelShell
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7 posted 2000-12-04 10:28 PM


Those three little words can two two things, lift you up higher than you ever thought possible or sink you down to your nose in quick sand.
It all depends, who said it, when they said it and why they said it.
Once, a very long time ago I loved this guy and I told him so, and it was the wong time, he had a girlfriend and didn't feel the same, we didn't talk for a while because it was akward.
Then he came back and said that he loved me, only now I wasn't too sure.  He said that he knew it was bad timing before, but love just doesn't dissapear, so I must love him still - only I don't think I ever actually loved him, becuase it wasn't there.

So you have to choose everything so carefully.
And I think that there is a time in everyone's life when they wish they could turn back the clock and start over, maybe not saying something they said or saying something they were too chicken to say the first time.
That's another common thing, regretting something you didn't do.
I think their both pretty bad.
In one respect you say to yourself "If only I hadn't said that" and in the other you say "If only I'd said that".

I can't decide which is less painful.
You can't take back something you did say, but you may not get another chance.

Hang in there, it does get better and this poem was a brilliant mix of your emotions.

Keep it up.

**I didn't loose my mind it was mine to give away**
~Robbie Williams~



DreamerGrl27
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8 posted 2000-12-06 09:38 PM


Thanks so much for all your replies...I really appreciate it a lot!!! xoxo
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