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0 posted 2000-11-30 05:11 PM


Hey everyone!! Im sorry that the first time i posted this poem it was blank...i dunno why but i must have spazzed out or somethin...Well here it is...FINALLY!!!


I told you that i loved you,
A countless number of times.
But i dont think you heard me,
I was saying it through my eyes.
I told you that i cared for you,
In many different ways.
I dont think you heard me then either,
You had to listen closely to my heart,
To hear what it had to say.
I told you that i need you,
Numerous times in our life.
I doubt that you heard me,
Unless you read it in the tears i cried..
I need you to know i love you,
I need you to know i care.
I need you to know that my world would end,
If i awoke tomorrow and you werent there.
I need you to know that i need you,
Oh so very much.
I need you to know that i melt,
Soley by your touch..
I love you so much,
I need you  to breathe,
I care for you deeply,
I told you these things many times,
Have you heard me?

© Copyright 2000 Michele - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2000-11-30 05:19 PM


This is a wonderful piece. I hope that this person has finally heard you, although I don't think that anyone could ignore writing like this!   Thanks for posting!

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2 posted 2000-11-30 05:31 PM


this was a really well written poem..i hope the person this was for heard what you were trying to tell them..again..great poem..
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3 posted 2000-11-30 07:30 PM


I liked this poem a lot. You really do have talent.



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4 posted 2000-12-03 12:42 PM


Thanks everyone for your replies  
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5 posted 2000-12-03 02:47 PM


I like how this poem was written, I was a little surprised when I read this:
"But i dont think you heard me,
I was saying it through my eyes."
I just think that's really great writing, and then you follow the same pattern through the whole poem.  I don't know if you get waht I'm saying, but I really like the poem    I hope that if someone needs to know you love them, you share this poem with them  !
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6 posted 2000-12-04 06:52 PM


Great poem! i think this really has deep meaning to it. i hope you are able to share this with that special someone and that they understand that you are trying to share your love with them. keep it up!  

"just because you dont know it or havent seen it, doesnt mean it isnt possible"

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