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Child of the Stars
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0 posted 2000-11-28 08:52 PM



Uhh...don't ask where this came from......

Root beer from the bottle baby
Sanity's makin' me go crazy
Do you love me?  You say MAYBE????
Help me, I'm lost in abusive blues...

Anarchy's the cry of the people
Raven's perched on your church steeple
Then the smeaple (what the heck's a smeaple?)
Was nibblin on my blue suede shoes...



[This message has been edited by Child of the Stars (edited 11-28-2000).]

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Ina
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1 posted 2000-11-28 09:09 PM


this was intersting.....good work
Regina

IsGona
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2 posted 2000-11-28 09:10 PM


Root beer from the bottle baby!!!
This caught me off guard.
I liked it though
IsGona

"Every body has their destiny...
I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN
~Hatebreed~

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3 posted 2000-11-29 01:48 PM


WHERE DID THIS COME FROM?!
Ha! I asked.....i continue my reign of defiance! mwhahaha!!!
great poem.....odd....i like odd.....odd=great.... well most of the time hehe. But this was good!
mwhahaha!!



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4 posted 2000-11-29 01:54 PM


This is a bit strange, but it's good. I can't exactly figure out the symbolism, though. Anyway, keep up the good work!

"Where there is great love there are always miracles" -Cather
"Love heals everything, and love is all there is"- Zukav



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5 posted 2000-11-29 05:07 PM


That first line caught my attention too, and the whole poem, yeah, it's different.  Nice job

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Child of the Stars
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6 posted 2000-11-29 07:11 PM


  
  Ooh! ooooh! oh! Let me esplain!!!!!!
Root beer from the bottle baby=i do things differently when im alone. like drink root beer from the bottle.
Sanity's makin' me go crazy=well, it is....lol..
Do you love me? You say MAYBE????=somebody's not sure if they love me.
Help me, I'm lost in abusive blues...=im lost in this depression that keeps beating me up.
Anarchy's the cry of the people=the whole presidential election deal. people are pleading for anarchy..
Raven's perched on your church steeple=churches dont have the power of light anymore
Then the smeaple (what the heck's a smeaple?)=no idea.....
Was nibblin on my blue suede shoes...=good times are bein eaten up.
So tank yew all for reading!!!

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[This message has been edited by Child of the Stars (edited 11-29-2000).]

vlraynes
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7 posted 2000-12-02 01:16 AM



This is really great...creative and fun!  
I love it!  

*smiles*,
~vicky




"...until you have read the verse on his
heart, you have not truely met the poet."
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B@BYG!RL
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8 posted 2000-12-02 08:56 AM


Your opening line caught my eye.  Thanx for explaining the lines, i understand it now  

Very creative!  and different, but a good kinda different!  

~Dianne

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