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Morouxshi San
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0 posted 2000-11-26 03:20 PM



-=Happiness=-

are you happy?
there with the rope
around your neck,
ever so tight...

are you happy?
you who cant be
without attention,
ever so lonely...

are you happy?
there in your room
acompanied by you,
ever so pesimistic...

are you happy?
are you really?
what is happiness but love?
what is love but trust?

are you happy?
cause I am,
and i want you to know
I love you...

NOTE: Child of the Stars should know what im talking bout  
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San, the wise
San, the dumb
San, the guy...


[This message has been edited by Morouxshi San (edited 11-26-2000).]

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LoveBug
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1 posted 2000-11-26 03:31 PM


This is a really well-written piece. It's good to have friends that understand and love you. Thanks for sharing.  

"Where there is great love there are always miracles" -Cather
"Love heals everything, and love is all there is"- Zukav



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2 posted 2000-11-26 04:41 PM


Felipe this was great......not one of your best but i did like this.
Good job!



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!


Child of the Stars
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3 posted 2000-11-26 08:59 PM



  Hey. Buddy this was great...I'm so glad you're happy ToOtElZ.

  ~Carly

Lakewalker
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4 posted 2000-11-27 03:35 PM


I think this is good, I like it.  I had a thought that I was going to type here, but now I've gone and forgot it.  Don't you hate when that happens?  Anyway, good job.

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5 posted 2000-11-27 03:41 PM


are you happy?
cause I am,
and i want you to know
I love you...

I love this!!!Really good work...I especially love that part that I posted...Keep up the good work!!!


People leave our lives as quickly as they come, but the ones that mean something leave footprints in our hearts.

Morouxshi San
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6 posted 2000-11-27 08:42 PM


Thanx for the replies.

dope it is not a very deep, extracomplicated, heavy processing poem because its not meant to be.
sometimes you just have to say what you have to say without having to make the other person think about what you were really talking about, kinda like in my poem "Bait".



San, the wise
San, the dumb
San, the guy...

Dopey Dope
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7 posted 2000-11-30 06:07 PM


Oh really San? I did not know that poems could be simple! OMG!!!!! What a concept!
haha....anyway .......Dreams are a wakeful state for the senses....i agree on that one bud......but i still believe a coma is what i said in history class.....so ha!



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!


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