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hoppy
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0 posted 2000-11-25 01:45 PM


If one lives inside the box they cannot see what is outside...so exists the same phenomenon outside.


i exist outside the box
watching you living within
believing I was in the right
now i know you're not right.
wasting your life within
the confines of inadequate times
of destilation and confusion
filled with endless apathy.
i see your error but not mine
here's the key i found while wandering
so i posess the knowledge to set you
free because i have the truth
to release you from your shackles
though i never would have found it
If i hadn't lived outside the box


Swift as a shadow, short as any dream;
Brief as the lightning in the collied night,
That in a spleen unfolds both heaven and earth,
And ere a ma

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Lakewalker
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1 posted 2000-11-25 02:26 PM


Hey,
Great thoughts in this one! I like how it's written, nice job

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LoveBug
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2 posted 2000-11-25 02:53 PM


It's always better to be an outsider!   You do a great job of explaining this. Thanks for posting.

"Where there is great love there are always miracles" -Cather
"Love heals everything, and love is all there is"- Zukav



Erin
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3 posted 2000-11-25 04:48 PM


I liked this one alot. It was really good. Thanks for sharing it!!!

People leave our lives as quickly as they come, but the ones that mean something leave footprints in our hearts.

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4 posted 2000-11-26 12:04 PM


This was great. A little bit of a philosophical tone to it......wonderful!



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!


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5 posted 2000-11-27 03:40 PM



  Hey. I really, really enjoyed this. The wording was great and I too liked the tone. Great piece of writing!!!!

  ~Carly

A word is dead
When it is said
Some say,
I say it just
Begins to live
That day.

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