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vix616
Junior Member

since 2000-11-25

Posts 22

0 posted 2000-11-25 11:35 AM

The World Above

Everyday I stare at the sky
Don't bother asking
I don't know why
Maybe it's because i've nothing to da
But then again
Maybe that's not true
Whatever it is, i don't care
Just as long
As it's still there..

Nikkisweet
Member

since 2000-02-14

Posts 183
Tx, Dallas

1 posted 2000-11-25 12:16 PM

This was really good. Short but sweet. Sometimes we wonder what's past the sky or maybe we look at because it's just so pretty and we are in a trance...you never know..

~Writing is filling up your
soul with words~
--Me

Lakewalker
Member Elite

since 2000-08-05

Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people

2 posted 2000-11-25 02:03 PM

I liked the style of this one. The beginning was great and so was the end, and the middle too. Nice job

"Just as long
As it's still there.."

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker
http://www.thehungersite.com

vix616
Junior Member

since 2000-11-25

Posts 22

3 posted 2000-11-25 03:24 PM

Thanx for your replies
Nikki - yes, i suposse we do wonder what a beyond the sky - gives me an idea for another poem!
Lakewalker - thanx for your compliments, i must say that when i read it back i quite liked the end aswell. I never go back and change my poems though even if i didn't like it, i believe that what you write first is how you really feel..

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

4 posted 2000-11-26 12:27 PM

Yea........just as long as it's there we'll all be fine.
If it's not there.......OMG RUN!!!!!!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

5 posted 2000-12-15 06:45 PM

GEEZ!!! This is really good. Short but excellent. It's got like hidden meanings to it. well done vix616. wel done. thanks for the share

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR

Child of the Stars

Senior Member

since 2000-09-07

Posts 1658
Ann Arbor, MI

6 posted 2000-12-16 12:04 PM

I really liked this. Great job

~Carly

a_little_girl
Member

since 2000-05-08

Posts 307
San Alejandro, HI, USA

7 posted 2000-12-16 06:21 PM

The simple wonders of clouds...all summed up into one beautiful poem...well done.

--Little Girl

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