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Tia
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since 2000-05-05
Posts 41
massachusetts

0 posted 2000-11-25 10:36 AM


When I saw you in the doorway
you looked into my eyes
I wished it was like before,
before all the lies
I know I still love you
but you don't feel the same
I crumbled up your world
I'm the only one to blame
I'm so sorry
for making you cry
and I'm so sorry
for all of the lies
I wish you knew how much I care
and have you come back to me
but I know that will never happen
i just wish that you could see
that I'll always love you
that's how it'll always be
I just wish that you could love me
I just wish that you could see



My theory is that I might die at any moment, the tragety is that I don't...

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LoveBug
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1 posted 2000-11-25 11:31 AM


Oh.. I know how you're feeling, my friend. It always hurts to love someone who doesn't have feelings for you anymore. I hope writing this helped you feel better. Thanks for sharing.< !signature-->

"Where there is great love there are always miracles" -Cather
"Love heals everything, and love is all there is"- Zukav




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vix616
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since 2000-11-25
Posts 22

2 posted 2000-11-25 11:48 AM


I understand how u feel Tia - i'm sure we all do and have been through or are going through the same thing
luv vicki  

Nikkisweet
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since 2000-02-14
Posts 183
Tx, Dallas
3 posted 2000-11-25 12:00 PM


This was a really good poem.  I've felt like this before.  And I've wished that all the guys that I've had crushes on would see right into me so they could know what I'm feeling.  You expressed this well.  Good Job!  )

~Writing is filling up your
soul with words~
--Me

Lakewalker
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since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people
4 posted 2000-11-25 01:41 PM


This one was good, it really tells your feelings well.  Nicely written  < !signature-->

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker
http://www.thehungersite.com


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Erin
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since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527
~Chicago~
5 posted 2000-11-25 04:44 PM


We all make mistakes and learn from them. So learn from what you did wrong and dont do it again. Thanks for sharing this piece.

People leave our lives as quickly as they come, but the ones that mean something leave footprints in our hearts.

Dopey Dope
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6 posted 2000-11-26 12:25 PM


This was great.........unrequited love really does suck. I hope the best for you!



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!


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