navwin » Archives » Teen Poetry #3 » Seperated
Teen Poetry #3
Post A Reply Post New Topic Seperated Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
niceguy
Member
since 2000-11-13
Posts 113
Sapello, NM, USA

0 posted 2000-11-24 08:03 PM


Hey everybody, I wrote this a few minutes ago. It's a bunch of rambling really and there is no real format to this. Just wanted to see what some of you would think.

Seperated

Two people seperated by obstacles large and small,
Yet they have prevailed.
The distance is great but their hearts close,
Their feelings have bridged the gap.
Seperation has brought them together,
Their souls have touched and their hearts are one.




"Don't take love for granted...once it's gone, it hurts."

© Copyright 2000 John - All Rights Reserved
LoveBug
Deputy Moderator 5 Tours
Moderator
Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697

1 posted 2000-11-24 08:16 PM


"Distance makes the heart grow fonder"

Things tend to grow in the face of adversity, and love is no exception. You describe this very well in your "rambling". Thanks for posting!

"Where there is great love there are always miracles" -Cather
"Love heals everything, and love is all there is"- Zukav



niceguy
Member
since 2000-11-13
Posts 113
Sapello, NM, USA
2 posted 2000-11-24 09:29 PM


Thanx Lovebug. I'm glad that you liked it.
I wasn't too sure if it was going to sound alright or anything. Thanx a lot.


"Don't take love for granted...once it's gone, it hurts."

Lakewalker
Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people
3 posted 2000-11-24 09:35 PM


I think this is good, the feeling in it is pure.  nice job!

"Yet they have prevailed"

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker

[URL=http://www.thehungersite.com]http://www

niceguy
Member
since 2000-11-13
Posts 113
Sapello, NM, USA
4 posted 2000-11-24 09:42 PM


Hey thanx Lake. Glad that you liked it. I thought that this was going to be one of those poems that just didn't turn out right.
Thanx a lot. Glad u liked it.

"Don't take love for granted...once it's gone, it hurts."

Dopey Dope
Deputy Moderator 1 Tour
Moderator
Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico
5 posted 2000-11-25 02:04 AM


I like this poem. I think it's a cool concept on how people were brought TOGETHER by SEPERATION.
keep it up!



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!


niceguy
Member
since 2000-11-13
Posts 113
Sapello, NM, USA
6 posted 2000-11-25 01:15 PM


Thanx dopey. It's true too...people who are seperated in a situation like this, grow stronger. Well, at least in a lot of times they do. Glad that you liked it. Laterz.

"Don't take love for granted...once it's gone, it hurts."

Post A Reply Post New Topic ⇧ top of page ⇧ Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.
navwin » Archives » Teen Poetry #3 » Seperated

Passions in Poetry | pipTalk Home Page | Main Poetry Forums | 100 Best Poems

How to Join | Member's Area / Help | Private Library | Search | Contact Us | Login
Discussion | Tech Talk | Archives | Sanctuary