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tq_99
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since 2000-11-14
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Las Vegas, NM, US

0 posted 2000-11-24 06:31 PM



I wrote this poem in relation to what I'm going through right now, I've lost my best friend, she never talks anymore, I'm messing up everything, I can't do anything right. I've messed up so much recently and it's impossible to get back.


  *All Me*


I take a look at my life
and realize how much I've messed up
There's nothing good about it
I've lost all hope
Sometimes I wish I could fix everything
or at least do something
I don't know what to do
All I know is that I've lost you
and my closest friends too
That is enough to kill my heart
Because I finally realized it was me from the start

"Some say a rich man has it all but if he has no friends he is nothing"

© Copyright 2000 Josh A. - All Rights Reserved
Dopey Dope
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1 posted 2000-11-24 06:37 PM


Hey this was great but i do hope that things do work out fine in the end.



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

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Lakewalker
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2 posted 2000-11-24 09:15 PM


I hope everything gets better in your life soon.  Your poem expressed your regret and frustration (at least that's what I sensed)well, good job   

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SwEeTnSeXy18
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since 2000-09-18
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3 posted 2000-12-13 09:02 PM


tq_99:

Hi. I can relate to this poem because me and my best friend of 6 years now were having problems but they have been worked out. So don't give up and even if it was your fault if shes a true friend she will come around, it just may take some time for the pain to heal. Good luck!   I like your quote also.

~Lisa~


~in order to gain, you have to lose~


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4 posted 2000-12-14 05:12 PM


well this is a great piece that needs more replies, hey guys replie more to other poems then just mine i think 134 enough i mean i got 130 then this poem well sorry  i sound like a big meanny but im depressed and well i love your poem


"i just love when you bring your whole crew because its just a bigger piece of cake for me to chew threw"


IsGona
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since 2000-07-14
Posts 723

5 posted 2000-12-15 11:22 AM


Great job on this poem.  I can sort of relate.  My best friend lives many miles a way now and I feel our relationship deteriorating, and I sometimes feel like the biggest screw up in the world.  But life always goes on and I always have a chance to make things better.  As do you.  Good luck to ya.
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I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN
~Hatebreed~


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katherine
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Canberra Australia
6 posted 2000-12-15 11:42 PM


hey great poem!! just stay positive things will work out in the end
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7 posted 2000-12-16 02:35 PM



  I know how you feel, I just lost my best friend too. This was a great poem and you really let it all loose.  Great job and keep writing, it helps.

   ~Carly

kimmy
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since 2000-07-31
Posts 98

8 posted 2000-12-17 01:08 AM


i hope things start getting better for you soon....but i liked your poem...
apsara
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since 2000-11-09
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9 posted 2000-12-18 05:29 AM


Great poem. Hope things will look up for you from here on. Keep working on this friendship and I hope it'll go well.

apsara

CocoBaci
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since 2000-05-06
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10 posted 2000-12-19 03:39 AM



Excellent write...

Ya know, we all make mistakes so don't be too too hard on yourself...

Hugs2U
coco

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