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Lakewalker
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On the streets w/ people

0 posted 2000-11-24 03:24 PM


Cottage on the shore,
must I say any more?
Peaceful lakeshore breeze,
life so full of things to ease,
relaxing on the sandy beach,
refreshing water's within reach.
So calm and soothing this here land,
in the dunes the lovers stand,
wathcing a sunset in an awe,
enjoying the seagulls play and caw.
Vibrant colors streak the sky
and on this life I do rely.

September 30, 2000


"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!!

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© Copyright 2000 Lakewalker - All Rights Reserved
vlraynes
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since 2000-07-25
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Somewhere... out there...
1 posted 2000-11-25 01:56 AM



Lakewalker-
  this is really beautiful..
  you've painted a wonderful picture
  with your words..
  enjoyed it much.

  *smiles*,
  -vicky




"...until you have read the verse on his
heart, you have not truely met the poet."
-vlraynes



Dopey Dope
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2 posted 2000-11-25 02:03 AM


This was great. I thought the title fit your name.....but duh ......they both have the word LAKE in them.
Anyway i liked it a lot!



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

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kimmy
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3 posted 2000-11-25 02:05 AM


your poem held great imagery in it...well written..i enjoyed it muchly..
Kit McCallum
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4 posted 2000-11-25 09:46 AM


Lovely descriptive piece Lakewalker! This holds a special place for me, as I grew up with summers at a wonderful cottage in the Muskokas of Ontario ... such a beautiful place. Very much enjoyed this little trip down memory lane for me!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

Lakewalker
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On the streets w/ people
5 posted 2000-11-26 11:49 AM


Hey everyone, thank you for the replies!!

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker
http://www.thehungersite.com

Child of the Stars
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6 posted 2000-11-26 09:30 PM


  
  Hey there. This was so real to me...would this happen to be bout lake michigan???? Cuz that's what I saw..well great, great job.

  ~Carly

[This message has been edited by Child of the Stars (edited 11-26-2000).]

chic
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yellville, Ar, U.S.
7 posted 2000-11-27 12:52 PM


Great poem LW!!!

"Life is a game and we have to play, but in the end...we all die."-by me!

Erin
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8 posted 2000-11-27 02:48 PM


Lakewalker~
What a beautiful poem!!!You have painted a beautiful picture with it too!!!Thanks for sharing it and sorry it took me so long to reply...


People leave our lives as quickly as they come, but the ones that mean something leave footprints in our hearts.

Lakewalker
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On the streets w/ people
9 posted 2000-11-28 03:39 PM


Yeah, this is lake michigan, it's great!  Get it, great, like great lake, ha, I crack myself up.  ok, not really, but, uh, anyway....  thanks for replying everyone

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker
http://www.thehungersite.com

Ina
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Quebec, Canada
10 posted 2000-11-28 09:08 PM


Lakewalker,
this brought back memories of this summer, spending a great deal of time w/ my bf in his cabin....you painted a picture
Regina

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11 posted 2001-03-30 03:32 PM


I like this one quite a bit.  The syllable count was obviously paid a lot of attention and it made the flow magnificent.  
Another marvelous post.
~Allan

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