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brendon2k
Junior Member

since 2000-05-11

Posts 38
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0 posted 2000-11-24 02:05 AM

A thought to end my life?
Or just the thought to take anothers?

This feeling of hate prevails

As I'm flying with broken wings
And were dying of broken hearts

A perfect world murdered
By the thoughts
Of a million unheard cries

Are we searching for something
Maybe something to blind
Our hearts filled with pain

The perfect life is held
By a noose tied tight
Around the neck of happiness

Vision is still left destorted
In hope of something to find

Kit McCallum

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Member Laureate

since 2000-04-30

Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada

1 posted 2000-11-24 06:31 AM

Hate can be such an incredibly strong emotion as you have expressed ... I sincerely hope these powerful feelings are not true to life for you though Brendon. Love and forgiveness can be equally as strong if we search out the good. I hope you are able to find that as you appear to be "searching" in your closing lines ...

"Vision is still left destorted
In hope of something to find"

Best wishes for brighter days,
/Kit

branden726

Senior Member

since 2000-09-25

Posts 607
Bay City, MI

2 posted 2000-11-24 10:22 AM

Wow very very powerfull its got a lot of meaning to it. Good work
~Branden~

"i just love when you bring your whole crew because its just a bigger piece of cake for me to chew threw"

Lakewalker
Member Elite

since 2000-08-05

Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people

3 posted 2000-11-24 02:21 PM

Hey,
Great job of writing this one, I think it's really good.

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!!

http://www.thehungersite.com

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

4 posted 2000-11-25 03:09 AM

YEa this poem has a lot of meaning and depth. I liked it a lot! I hope all is well!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

5 posted 2000-12-13 06:29 PM

true, there is a lot of hatred in this world caused by life's unfairness. But still, "love you enemies as you love yourself". hard to do, but imagine what you would gain as a person if you do

thanks for the explicit read

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR

Child of the Stars

Senior Member

since 2000-09-07

Posts 1658
Ann Arbor, MI

6 posted 2000-12-13 08:43 PM

This was great...adding it to my library...

~Carly

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