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keoni
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0 posted 2000-11-22 06:02 PM



I got settled and I’ve turned my cheek
Last time you hurt me I could not speak
Lies and love are like oil and water
You tried to mix them and I became love’s martyr
You want me to be complacent and look the other way
Allowing you to move on and me to fade away
So I held onto my pride and my dignity
Said goodbye for now, until you’re ready for me
I met someone and got involved
You met him and your world dissolved
Traded all your friends for this one guy
Look back, no one’s there, you wonder why
You want to fix it before you lose it all
You realize that without friends, you will fall
Try to sneak back into my life like I won’t even miss it
Cause you know what you’ve done, but you don’t know how to fix it
I’m not ready to let you back in
When nothing’s changed, no one can win
I still love you, and I know you do me
But I don’t miss the pain, I miss what we used to be
That feeling made me invincible, got me high
Things changed, you hurt me, and I wanted to die
You crushed my heart and killed my trust
I’m not ready for round 2, can’t let there be us
In time it’ll come and we’ll be alright
Cause the fire’s still burning, just not as bright
But you don’t know where to begin, so I won’t let you start
Cause I know I’m not ready to let you back in my heart


© Copyright 2000 Jon - All Rights Reserved
keoni
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1 posted 2000-11-22 08:05 PM


Bumping this up before it falls off the page!
                                   Jon

vlraynes
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2 posted 2000-11-22 09:46 PM



Jon-
   excellent job of expressing some
   very difficult and painful emotions.
   sometimes it does take awhile to
   trust again in the people who have
   hurt us deeply...even when we believe
   they are sorry.  I hope someday you'll
   be able to at least be friends again.

   my best to you,
   -vicky




"...until you have read the verse on his
heart, you have not truely met the poet."
-vlraynes



Jenn Cirrincione
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3 posted 2000-11-22 09:52 PM


I wonder why people haven't replied to this yet? It's very good. I'm sorry you were in such a tough relationship, we've all had them. Maybe one day, things will be better for you two...till then try and keep your head up.   Kudos on the work!
xoxo
Jenn


"Guess I'm not smart, I let you un-nerve me, I let you control me; afraid the truth would hurt me, when it's you that hurts me more." TLC

Nikkisweet
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since 2000-02-14
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4 posted 2000-11-22 11:34 PM


~*I'm helping bump this up!  This was a really good poem.  Each line kept wanting me to read the next, and the next, and then next, until it's finished.  There's a word for that...but I can't think of it....oh well...good Poem though!*~

~Writing is filling up your
soul with words~
--Me

Lakewalker
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5 posted 2000-11-23 08:24 PM


I think I was the one responsible for moving your poem so far down the page, I was trying to get caught up on replying   This one is written so incredibly well, it felt real to me.  I like it!  

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!!

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Isabel Galaxia
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6 posted 2000-11-23 11:13 PM


Wow!! This is great, I love it!  It had great flow and rhyme.  Keep it up and keep your head up, smile
Bel

Erin
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7 posted 2000-11-24 12:07 PM


Keoni~
You expressed yourself so well. You let all the pain out. I am glad to hear that you wont let her back in your heart. Its hard when you lose someone you care about that turned their back on you. Its not worth going back to cuz she did it to you once. And she just may break your heart again if you let her back in. Thanks for sharing this piece. Keep up the good work!!!


People leave our lives as quickly as they come, but the ones that mean something leave footprints in our hearts.

Dopey Dope
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8 posted 2000-11-25 03:33 AM


This was great!!!!
if you're not ready then don't do it.
good job!



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!


LoveBug
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9 posted 2000-11-25 11:14 AM


This is a really good piece. I'm glad you see that this person isn't right for you right now. Stand your ground, and more power to you!!!  

"Where there is great love there are always miracles" -Cather
"Love heals everything, and love is all there is"- Zukav



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