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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair 
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When air converts thin and struggles grow stacked, Find the heart inside to yearn for your goal, Remember the glory that keeps you tracked, Running unmasks fear, be calm as you stroll, As you pave roads for future to survive, Be proud of who you have become today, For you’ve generated the will to strive, Concluding these tasks, face another day, Tilt your head towards the bright sun to see, What exactly will happen to you soon, Look long enough, and amazed you will be, Reflection of praise appears in the moon, The night sky beholds such a concerned cause, Blackness and white specs control you to pause, Jeremy D. Raulinaitis 11/20/00 "...if you've never met me, then you've no right to judge me. I have a good heart, but this heart can get ugly." ~DMX~ |
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Kandi Member
since 2000-06-14
Posts 354North of Hell |
Wow....very well written. Sonnets are hard to do. You tackled this one nicely. Thank you for the positivity, something we need a lot more of in this world  ~Kris ~*Things you see the way you see them will never be seen again*~ ~Won't you come and hold my hand? This world has taken me as far as it can... wit |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
I love the positive, inspirational mood you've set in this piece Jeremy ... very nicely written indeed! Best wishes, /Kit |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
jeremy- very upbeat and positive... i really enjoyed reading this. *smile* -vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truely met the poet." -vlraynes |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
"Be proud of who you have become today, For you’ve generated the will to strive" Great job on this, I like it, and ditto to the others "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Wow, this is very good. Kudos! I don't think I've read your work before... but I definitly like this! I may just have to go and read some more.xoxo Jenn "Guess I'm not smart, I let you un-nerve me, I let you control me; afraid the truth would hurt me, when it's you that hurts me more." TLC |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
The positivity in this one was great! I liked it a lot jeremy!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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