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kimmy
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0 posted 2000-11-21 08:18 PM



Lonely sensation invades,
Throughout your entire body,
The mind comprehends,
The heart feels abandoned,
The soul seems forgotten and lost.

Friends usually understand,
And helpless they seem now,
One tells you to forget,
One ignores your problem,
Most do not know about it.

Holding on in solitary confinement,
To any memories that may arise,
Some are filled with happiness,
Some are filled with regret,
Some are filled with sadness.

Only will you open your eyes,
To the joyfulness before them,
Once you see the glad,
Twice you feel the pain,
Thrice you touch depression.

And then life moves on and repeats itself.


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LoveBug
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1 posted 2000-11-21 08:21 PM


This is a really powerful piece. I can really feel your depression and sadness in this. We all feel like this sometimes, and I hope writing this helped you feel better. Thanks for sharing.

"Where there is great love there are always miracles" -Cather
"Love heals everything, and love is all there is"- Zukav



Lakewalker
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2 posted 2000-11-22 05:09 PM


Great job on this!!  I think it was creative the way you described this as "solitary confinement".  Again, great job on the poem

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!!

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3 posted 2000-11-25 04:01 AM


I thought this poem was great.
Keep them coming!



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!


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