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hmm. .. I can't seem to give it a title.... (sorry)
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hmm. .. I can't seem to give it a title.... (sorry) |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723
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For what crime Am I being Punished What hurt did I Inflict on Her Is it my Poverty Or maybe my Skills as a Lover What punishment Must I Inflict upon Me What punishment Do I need to Suffer Tell me the Answer Please Name the task to Ease the Pain "Every body has their destiny... I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN ~Hatebreed~ |
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
This is a really good piece. It seems like you're going through a tough time with someone right now. I know how that can be... you'll do anything to ease the pain. What I found is that the thing that helped the pain the most was writing it. I hope writing this helped some of the pain. As for a title, I'm not very good with titles myself, but how about "Tell me the answer"? "Where there is great love there are always miracles" -Cather "Love heals everything, and love is all there is"- Zukav |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
LoveBug ~ thank you for your reply. You always have something nice to say. This is actually an old poem I never posted so I did now. Your right though.. Writting this poem did help me sort out my feelings. Thanks again for the reply  IGona "Every body has their destiny... I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN ~Hatebreed~ |
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Kandi Member
since 2000-06-14
Posts 354North of Hell |
ARRRGH I'm terrible with titles too! I wish i had a suggestion for you but my mind is blank  ...but I just wanted to tell you that I really like this piece...very unique and well written. You have a talent with words, yes you do  Great job.Kris ~*Things you see the way you see them will never be seen again*~ ~Won't you come and hold my hand? This world has taken me as far as it can... wit |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
I hear ya... I hate trying to title my poems.... anyways, I'm glad you read my poem and enjoyed it. Thx for the compliments, your to nice. IsGona "Every body has their destiny... I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN ~Hatebreed~ |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Great poem you've written, I think it's done well. I like this style of yours Title, title, I don't know, "Ease the Pain" is my only thought, but that might take away from it's affect at the end of the poem, so i dunno. Whatever you decide i'm sure will be fine."Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! http://www.thehungersite.com |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
LAkewalker ~ I thaught the same thing for the title... kind why I just decided not to title it. Thanks for replying IsGona "Every body has their destiny... I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN ~Hatebreed~ |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
A great poem along with the style. I find titling the poems a very fun but hard thing to do. I have like more than 400 poems. It gets harder as things go along.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
Dopey ~ Thanks Maybe some day I will reach 100 poems... 400 seems out of reach. but still I sometimes just can't title these darn things. IsGona "Every body has their destiny... I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN ~Hatebreed~ |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Isgona~ I would (well maybe not anything) do something to erase the pain of a heartbreak...I would be much more worth it then going through that pain...Thanks for sharing this piece with us...I hope you find the perfect title to it soon... People leave our lives as quickly as they come, but the ones that mean something leave footprints in our hearts. |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
Thanks for taking the time to read my poem ERIN. I think I will just call it "Untitled"  lol. naw I'll prolly just end up up titling it "Ease the Pain."Thanks again for replying IsGona "Every body has their destiny... I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN ~Hatebreed~ |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Hey. This was great. Must the punishment fit the crime? Hmmmmmm...I feel compelled to ponder....well, ciao.... ~Carly |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
Carly~ Thanks for replying. I hope you are feeling better since lasttime I talked to you IsGona |
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