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My gift for you is simple.....
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My gift for you is simple..... |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada 
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My gift for you: My gift for you is not simple because it is my heart you must travel through atriums and ventricals before you can be a part of me. Life pumps through me, I'm not going to release my self to you yet, for I am to young, naive as some say for your love we both know that I have been through so much these past years My gift for you is me and all of me. I am not simple., I am fragile so don't break me or shake me My gift for you is just my heart for I know yours would be the same For all I can express is not in words ~Ina~ AKA Regina bear with me.....im trying some sort of new style |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
This was a lovely style Ina ... very nicely done ... sweet and tender sentiments, and nicely portrayed!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
I agree with Kit, this is a great style and it suits you well. When you give your heart to someone, you really have to be careful, because it's never the same once it's broken. You describe the caution well. Thanks for sharing! "Where there is great love there are always miracles" -Cather "Love heals everything, and love is all there is"- Zukav |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Hey, Great job on this one, I like how it's written, it's very good "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I hope all is well ina.....we havent spoken in a while. Anyway the poem was great i liked it a lot!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
This was so creative!!!I like it...And with trying the new style I thought that it was good!!!Keep it up!!! People leave our lives as quickly as they come, but the ones that mean something leave footprints in our hearts. |
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Kandi Member
since 2000-06-14
Posts 354North of Hell |
wow...I like your exploration of a totally unique style! You should try it again...you did well with this one! I loved the subject of the poem too...if only everyone would be just a little more careful with other people's hearts.... Keep writing and SMILE ~KRIS ~*Won't you come and hold my hand? This world has taken me as far as it can... without your smile.~* ~*If I never said I'm sorry, then I'm wrong, |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
well. I'm happy this one went over well...I might write some more(be very afraid!)lol....thank you for replying. Enjoy life! Regina aka Ina |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
I liked this one alot. It had a really clear and really cool message. Thanks Jon |
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