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mopey
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0 posted 2000-11-21 12:00 PM


I LIKE WRITING
BUT I HAVE NOTHING TO WRITE
THE URGE TO HURT MYSELF
I MUST FIGHT
FIGHT FOR MY LIFE
FIGHT FOR MY SANITY
SO MUCH PAIN
SO MUCH VANITY
I WAN TO BE PERFECT
THE AMERICAN DREAM
ALL THE FRUSTRATION
IS MAKING ME SCREAM
SCREAM IN MY HEART
SCREAM IN MY MIND
THE WILL TO GO ON
I MUST FIND
SO LEAVE ME TO SCREAM
AND LEAVE ME TO FIGHT
LEAVE ME TO WRITE
INTO THE NIGHT

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Child of the Stars
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1 posted 2000-11-21 12:52 PM


  Hey, this was..wow...I felt like someone was actually screaming....I don't know, I just felt this kinda conenction with this..soo uhh great job...

   ~Carly
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Kit McCallum
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2 posted 2000-11-21 07:36 PM


Wow ... powerful emotions expressed in this piece Mopey. Keep fighting, and please, if this is true to life ... do not hurt yourself. It's so difficult when we are either perfectionists, or if others expect us to be perfect. I struggled with this when I was younger, until finally I did realize that no one is perfect, so why on earth should "I" be any different. It was a tough thought to get through my head ... but it sure makes life a lot happier when you realize we're allowed to make mistakes.  Very expressive writing, great therapy for the soul, nicely done!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

IsGona
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3 posted 2000-11-21 09:11 PM


This is weel written.  I can feel you r frustration.  I thin kwriting in in all caps adds to the intensity.  Nice job
IsGona

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I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN
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Lucius Cade
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4 posted 2000-11-22 12:58 PM


That was all very raw and pure, straight from the soul. I love it when poets can express the inner voice that most shun away as bad thoughts.....very good.

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Lakewalker
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5 posted 2000-11-22 05:00 PM


This one is really good, it seemed intense.  Great work here!

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6 posted 2000-11-23 08:43 AM


Yea this one was definately intense but i also feel like this a lot. Great job
Dopey Dope
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7 posted 2000-11-25 01:05 AM


*quivers* the power in this one makes me shiver................i'll get back to you when i recooperate!



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kaile
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8 posted 2000-11-25 01:10 AM


mopey, the title pulled me in and i have been there myself....the desire to express your frustration but those darned stubborn words wouldnt come out...hmmmm

well, at least you wrote this one

vlraynes
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9 posted 2000-12-02 01:26 AM



mopey-
   wow...what a powerful write!
   i think many of us, at one time
   or another, have experienced the
   frustration you write of...you've
   done an excellent job of expressing
   these emotions...
   scream when you must...
   fight the negative feelings when you must...
   and above all
   WRITE WHEN YOU MUST..
  
   *smiles*
   ~vicky




"...until you have read the verse on his
heart, you have not truely met the poet."
-vlraynes



B@BYG!RL
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10 posted 2000-12-02 08:10 AM


Darn writers block!!  I always have it...  

Glad you managed to get a really good poem out!!  

~Dianne

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