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0 posted 2000-11-20 10:53 PM


-=Don't Walk Away=-

Please don't walk away,
don't turn your back on me.
We've worked so hard for this,
why cant you see???

All these feelings,
hitting with such force.
I don't know,
whether to be happy or remorse.

We're stronger than all this,
if we stick together we'll make it.
This is just a test of our love, if we fail..
the pain's like a soldier whos just been hit.

We can do this, we'll beat the odds,
and hold our love together.
I'm just asking you not to give up,
'cause I think I want to be with you forever.

I'm begging you,
I'm down on my knees.
Dont turn your back,
please don't walk away from me.*


"A true friend can see the truth and pain in your eyes, even when you're fooling everyone else"

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1 posted 2000-11-21 12:20 PM


It hurts when the person you care about wants to give up on your relationship. You describe the feelings well. Thanks for sharing.

"Where there is great love there are always miracles" -Cather
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2 posted 2000-11-21 12:58 PM


DQ~
Girl are you writing a poem on my relationship??? Me & my bf are going through some complicated times right now. And I feel as if you know everything thats going on just cuz of this poem. Well girl I thought it was amazing. I hope that you arent going through this right now. And if you need anyone to talk to you know the email.

P.S.~Do you mind if I print this out???


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3 posted 2000-11-21 02:25 PM


Lovebug~> Ohh how it hurts  

ERIN~~> hey grl, *sigh* yeah this one's true. its like we're soo perfect for each other its overwhelming, im younger then him and im handling it better. I'm always the one who pushes away in the end. kinda weird to be on the other end...but im fighting this! Once you experience something so real you'll do anything in your power to keep it


"A true friend can see the truth and pain in your eyes, even when you're fooling everyone else"

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4 posted 2000-11-21 09:46 PM


*bumping* acire where are you?

"A true friend can see the truth and pain in your eyes, even when you're fooling everyone else"

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5 posted 2000-11-21 09:47 PM


hey girl, awesome poem, keep it up i liked the topic here

jeremy r

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6 posted 2000-11-21 09:49 PM


OMG~! Eeww that pic looks horrible..im going to have to get a new one 4sure!

"A true friend can see the truth and pain in your eyes, even when you're fooling everyone else"

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7 posted 2000-11-21 09:56 PM


nope... I'm acire... (sorry)...
Any how  
this was a great poem.  thank you for sharing it
IsGona

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I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN
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8 posted 2000-11-21 09:58 PM


doh.... that was supposed to say "I'm not acire"... not "I'm acire"... ok so I'm an idiot....l8r
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9 posted 2000-11-21 11:47 PM


Wow, this poem is so true...nicely done. I just broke up with my b/f today because he is scared of getting close to people, and this poem really helped me realize some things about how I feel about him, so thank you for posting it, it meant a lot to me. Keep it up  
~Kris~


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10 posted 2000-11-22 12:23 PM


IsGona~> Hi   hehe its ok that you're not acire, i just didnt want him to miss this poem. but im glad you liked it  

Kandi~>Thats awesome this poem was able to help you. I'm really not quite sure what im going to do about this..because in all reality im just as scared as he is. guess i just act stronger


"A true friend can see the truth and pain in your eyes, even when you're fooling everyone else"

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11 posted 2000-11-22 04:04 PM


Hey,
What a great job you've done on this one, I like how it's written!

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12 posted 2000-11-22 05:16 PM


Lakewalker~ Hey   Your comments always mean so much to me. thank you and im glad you liked it    

~!*DQ*!~


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13 posted 2000-11-22 06:21 PM


Hi sweets, sorry it took me so long to reply
I'm just going thru all these emotions right now...why? I jus don't seem to understand
and no, it's not about her

Your poem made me mad actually  .  I'm pissed at that idiot for making you write this poem.  You deserve to be happy for you're a sweetheart.  And it doesn't take a genius to figure that out.  I'm sorry that you have to go thru this right now.  And i hope that you don't take offense that I call him an idiot.  Cause right now, he's being one.  I honestly didn't want to see the day that you have to right such a sad poem.  You've been really happy lately and you deserve to stay that way.  I fonly there's anything I can do to help you out.  All I can say is I'm here if you need someone to talk to, and don't you ever forget that.  I feel so bad for ya, and i'm so sorry.  Just email me if you wanna talk okay.

p.s.  i haven't talked to you in a while even when i see you online cause i thought you wanted me to leave you alone  

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR


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14 posted 2000-11-22 06:32 PM


Hi sweets, sorry it took me so long to reply
I'm just going thru all these emotions right now...why? I jus don't seem to understand
and no, it's not about her

Your poem made me mad actually  .  I'm pissed at that idiot for making you write this poem.  You deserve to be happy for you're a sweetheart.  And it doesn't take a genius to figure that out.  I'm sorry that you have to go thru this right now.  And i hope that you don't take offense that I call him an idiot.  Cause right now, he's being one.  I honestly didn't want to see the day that you have to right such a sad poem.  You've been really happy lately and you deserve to stay that way.  I fonly there's anything I can do to help you out.  All I can say is I'm here if you need someone to talk to, and don't you ever forget that.  I feel so bad for ya, and i'm so sorry.  Just email me if you wanna talk okay.

p.s.  i haven't talked to you in a while even when i see you online cause i thought you wanted me to leave you alone  

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR


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15 posted 2000-11-23 01:08 PM


acire~~> well you're about to get a continuation of this later tonite. Ryan and I had a long talk and he says he "doesnt want to drag me down with him while he tries to figure out what he wants." but i have to go...be looking forward to reading that..

~!*DQ*!~


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16 posted 2000-11-23 07:18 PM


Wow, appears if I am out of the loop on this one. But I hope things get better for you. It sucks to go through this kind of stuff.  
And I am very sorry for you! Nice writing though.
xoxo
Jenn


"Guess I'm not smart, I let you un-nerve me, I let you control me; afraid the truth would hurt me, when it's you that hurts me more." TLC

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17 posted 2000-11-23 08:15 PM


*sigh* I would just like to say my favorite quote that fits me perfectly~~> "I was asked how long I could go w/o having a guy. It's funny, the answer was so clear. I've only found one guy that has made me truly happy. One guy that I felt I could be myself with and that was enough. And then I lost him w/o even knowing why. And until some special mix of fate comes upon us, and he wants me back, then i can wait forever. As more guys come and more guys go..I always compare them to you...and then I realize the only one I want is you"  (

"A true friend can see the truth and pain in your eyes, even when you're fooling everyone else"

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18 posted 2000-11-24 09:53 AM


hey sweets --- don't worry, that idiot will find out the mistake that he did.  It's his loss.  I wanna go to kokomo today and smack that idiot at the back of the head.  Yup, i'll say it again, it's his loss. keep ya head up ok.  i'm glad to talk to you last night, at least i know you're not the type that does stupid things in situations like this.  talk to you later again sweets.  

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR


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19 posted 2000-11-24 01:29 PM


acire~~>believe it or not, i actually woke up this morning and he wasnt the first thing on my mind for once  

"A true friend can see the truth and pain in your eyes, even when you're fooling everyone else"

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20 posted 2000-11-24 01:45 PM


From what I've learned about guys, is that they just don't want to open up.  They feel like they have to be the strong one's in the relationship and be there for you.  Just yesterday, I talked to my boyfriend about that.  We had like a 3 hour talk and I told him that he could talk to me about any problems that he had going on and that I would always be here for him.  I also told him that for this relationship to work out, he would need to open up to me...and guess what?  By telling him and assuring him that, he has opened up to me, and it was just yesterday that we had this talk..I think you just need to talk to him.  And walking away is what they do when they don't open up.  If you really love him, then don't let him walk away.  
      I also LOVE that quote.  It's the same way with me and my b/f.  I hope things work out for you.  I'm another person that you can talk to...I love giving advice and I also love talking.  Check out some of my poems...they're about true love.
       Good Luck!  And here's another favorite quote of mine..."Guys are like stars, there are millions of them, but only one can make you dreams come true"


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21 posted 2000-11-24 05:46 PM


Hey Nikk   Thanks for our little talk today, meant alot! And i feel so much better after shopping hehe I swear shopping cures everything, atleast for the time being. talk to you later!!

**Kiley



"A true friend can see the truth and pain in your eyes, even when you're fooling everyone else"

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22 posted 2000-11-24 06:07 PM


hey sweets, did you get me anything  
glad to see you are a lot better  

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR


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23 posted 2000-11-24 11:16 PM


acire~> hey baby cakes!   LOL Ok yeah so hes at the same freakin party i was at tonite so i just left. I was bout to cry..and he ran out after me, and like grabbed my arm and made me talk to him. And i honestly said everything i wanted to say to him wedsnesday. He knows how i feel...and i wouldnt look him in the eye and he started to cry and i got into my car...

"A true friend can see the truth and pain in your eyes, even when you're fooling everyone else"

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24 posted 2000-11-25 02:13 AM


I hope all goes well!
This poem expressed a lot of pain.
Surely we DON'T like that!



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!


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25 posted 2000-11-25 02:35 AM


LOL Dopey...you never fail to make me smile

"A true friend can see the truth and pain in your eyes, even when you're fooling everyone else"

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26 posted 2000-11-26 06:56 PM




that's all i have to say

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR


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