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If I could look into your eyes....
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If I could look into your eyes.... |
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Rhiannon Member
since 1999-07-28
Posts 95Fayetteville, TN USA |
Kind of a raw version, I just wrote it....sorry! If I could look into your eyes I'd see my past All the kisses, all the love, All the emptiness I felt When I found out If I could see inside you I'd figure out why You left behind such a wonderful love I treated you so well And you treated me so badly But I stayed I held you close While you cried And I told you I'd love you regardless Of the other girls you were with Despite me I thought I had you completely I thought you were mine, and mine only How wrong I was Just because You said it would never happen Again But it happened And you chose to hurt me some more Figured you could get some more shots in Before you left for good Now I'm weak, I'm so scared That they're all like you I wish I knew I thought I had you Sad but so true- The night is my companion The solitude my guide Would I spend forever here And not be satisfied? Sarah MacLachlan, "Possession" |
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
It's always tough to look into the eyes of someone that hurt you so much. You describe the feelings well. Thanks for sharing. "Where there is great love there are always miracles" -Cather "Love heals everything, and love is all there is"- Zukav |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
This one did such a good job of using and showing feelings. I really like it, great work! "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! http://www.thehungersite.com |
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xShUgArHiGhx 
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
You definately had a very sad and heart-breaking experience and i'm really sorry you had to go through that...i also understand why you'd be so scared. But not all guys are like that, thank god. Theres your perfect guy out there someone...and you deserve him...the guy that will treat you right and will be everything you want..but you gotta go through a bunch of those looza's to get to him...i hope you find him soon hun. |
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Rhiannon Member
since 1999-07-28
Posts 95Fayetteville, TN USA |
Thank you all for your kind words  luf you much.leslie The night is my companion The solitude my guide Would I spend forever here And not be satisfied? Sarah MacLachlan, "Possession" |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This was great and we luf you too!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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