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Rhiannon
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0 posted 2000-11-16 10:49 PM


      Raw
      And filled up with you
      This delicious feeling overwhelms me
      And takes me away
      I return to the world with this
      Heavy kind of euophoria
      And this residue of pleasure
      Little laughter and little feelings, little
      Strands of hair in your lips
      A world in which only I exist
      Where the walls are thin and transparent
      Hollow
      The dust is shifting inside
      There's no where that I can hide
      Except when I'm
      Raw
      And filled up with you
      The sky swallows me
      And let's me drift on it's sweet current
      The clouds lift me up and
      Present me to heaven
      My only God is you



The night is my companion
The solitude my guide
Would I spend forever here
And not be satisfied?
Sarah MacLachlan, "Possession"


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Dopey Dope
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1 posted 2000-11-16 11:04 PM


I thought this poem was great. I liked the last line a lot. Keep up the writing!!!



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

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IsGona
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since 2000-07-14
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2 posted 2000-11-16 11:55 PM


A world where only I exist
great poem  

I'm glad you found a man that can make you feel this way
Isgona

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3 posted 2000-11-17 11:24 AM


Hey,
This one is interesting, I like how it's written.  Good work

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