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Winds of time |
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anomaly187 Member
since 2000-06-15
Posts 284San Francisco,CA,US |
haven't been on in a while but...my school assignment was to write a poem with similies and metaphors...please be as critical as you see fit of this piece..i really really would appreciate some responses... I have sailed the winds of time with wings of hate behind me, their children are like fetus, chained to their harvesting wombs. Their bodies are of plastic with covered up singe marks, their faces are contorted, hiding what they bare. the veins are in my walls seeping out abuse the cries of naive pigs your truths are coming loose little girl red, white, and blue stalking the streets like a prowler of the night growing on dirt like a cancerous tumor bleeding inside, she earned her last fee the clouds are parting, and nothings come true stare at your mirrored complexion, it's burning the whole way through. The infection is spreading inside us, melting all our skin there's nothing more beautiful than you there's nothing more beautiful than your demise the tears of the moon are falling on the earth everything turns to blood for your final rest i can still feel the razors edge, penetrating withing we're decaying underneath it all, dying for your sins.< !signature--> "It's better to burn out then fade away" [This message has been edited by anomaly187 (edited 11-16-2000).] |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Anomaly you bad bad person! I've missed you!!!!!! Anyway, the poem was great. I thought it kicked complete butt!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Did you already turn this in? I'd like to hear how you do on it, I think it's good. You should start posting more again!  "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Hey. I loved it. You've got an amazing way with words, and an ability to twist things..great job.. ~Carly |
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