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Set My Life To Music
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Set My Life To Music |
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Words_of_Glitter Member
since 2000-10-25
Posts 90USA |
His smile...so entrancing He sent my heart dancing Set my life to music And swept my feet out from under me Twirled me around Thought he'd never let me down The rush was so intense Felt myself move in every sense Never wanted the music to stop But every song has to end So I hang up my dancing shoes They look so worn and used The blisters on my feet Were worth it in the end Even though I lost a friend I gained memories that will never fade Memories that are etched onto the dance floor Where you and I will tango...nevermore "Do not marry the one that you can live with. Marry the one you cannot live without." |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
I really enjoyed this piece. I love how you use dancing to describe your relationship with this person. I'm glad that you think that it was all worth it. Always cherish the memories! False gems may shine as brightly as the genuine article, but there are always those who can tell the difference. |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
Hey this was GREAT! Really...I loved it, it reminds me of that song..what's it called...can't remember the name. Oh well. Anyway, keep it up  Bel |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This was great. I too liked how you used dancing with your partner as an analogy for a relationship. Great poem!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
I love how you described your relationship to this guy hun...it was very awesome. The poem also seemed so romantic..you can actually picture two people dancing and gazing into eachothers eyes...great job hun! |
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curlygurly Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 276USA |
AWESOME POEM! it was described in such a romantic way..... it was like you could really feel it. great poem!  Curly "So many tears i've cried, so much pain inside" -Lenny Kravitz |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Ditto to all of the others, I love how you used this dance to describe the relationship. This poem is well done, keep posting "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Lucius Cade Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 235Saskatchewan |
Holy ****. What a beautiful comparison. I absolutely loved this poem. Lucidity is the answer to all problems |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
I think it's been said by everyone that replied, but... Good Job IsGona |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
This is a definitly interesting POV on a relationship. Creative! Good job... P.s Isabel, Do you mean "I hope you dance..."? xoxo Jenn< !signature--> "Guess I'm not smart, I let you un-nerve me, I let you control me; afraid the truth would hurt me, when it's you that hurts me more." TLC [This message has been edited by Jenn Cirrincione (edited 11-18-2000).] |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
This is really good..I like it a lot  One of the best one's I've read today. great job. keep em comingI see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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