im a flame in a fire (plz read and reply)

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Ina
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since 2000-10-09

Posts 1236
Quebec, Canada

0 posted 2000-11-15 07:34 PM

well I dont know how many poems like this i have written but its not many so bear w/ me.plz reply .Ina
I'm a flame in a fire,
wanting to be released
but never will be
wanting you to come
and extinguish my
burning desire...
please don't leave me now
we have only begun
you just might be the love
of my life
but I know you don't care
if I crackle and slowly
die away
for I am just a little
flame not fully formed, but
please what look I'm stronger
than I used to be, look I'm
more dangerous, I can hurt
people too
wait for me, I love you
You turn around and stare
deeply into my burning desire
and sizzle away
my heart is broken, because
im just another flame in the fire.
~ina~

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

1 posted 2000-11-15 08:56 PM

This was great Ina. Pretty sad though....just another flame in the fire. Lost within the mesh of fire without your own true identity. Hey, it happens to the best of us (i.e. me hehe)....keep that head up cutie!

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since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
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2 posted 2000-11-15 10:43 PM

This was a really awesome poem, it had a lot of meaning behind it although it was pretty sad. Getting lost in the crowd does suck...great job

niceguy
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since 2000-11-13

Posts 113
Sapello, NM, USA

3 posted 2000-11-15 11:31 PM

This poem has a meaning behind it that many people including me have felt at least once in their life. I have always wanted to write a poem about this but I could never find the words. Now I don't have too because you just described it perfectly. Remember, you are not alone in this. Hang in there and keep up the good work. Laterz.

"Don't take love for granted...once it's gone, it hurts."

Lakewalker
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since 2000-08-05

Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people

4 posted 2000-11-16 08:28 PM

I think you did a really good job with this one, I like it

I really love how you ended it!

"my heart is broken, because
im just another flame in the fire."

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

5 posted 2000-11-17 05:00 PM

hmmmmm it's different alright, it leans into story telling. But I still like it. thanks for sharing Ina. keep it coming

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR

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