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jocelyhn New Member
since 2000-11-14
Posts 7 |
~*When*~ I can’t get you Off of my mind You smile at me And I feel like my heart has been blind all this time Should I tell you how I feel? Or would that scare you away? Tell me what to do Tell me what to say Because no one but you Has ever made me feel loved No one knows me Better than you And the only thing I can do Is to try and confide in you So I am asking now What do you want from me? One touch of your hand I can’t wait to see you again |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!!! This was a wonderful first post. Love is something to cherish. I hope all works out for you. Good luck and much love!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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tq_99 Junior Member
since 2000-11-14
Posts 45Las Vegas, NM, US |
First off, GREAT poem! I really like the way that you made everything fit together. Keep up the good work! I also wanted to say thank you because this poem was perfect for the way that I am feeling right now and I wanted to say thank you because it made me realize some things, and I can definetly relate to everything in that poem. Great job! - tq_99 "Some say a rich man has it all but if he has no friends he is nothing" |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!! I already know what everyone else in here is gonna tell you. "tell him" they'd say. and that's exactly what i'm telling you to do. Maybe you don't need advice, but it's a big part of passions. Thanks for the read. keep posting I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Welcome to Passions!!!! Great first post hun!! I know the feeling that you expressed in the poem all too well. Excellent poem..i cant wait to read more! |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
 Welcome to Passions Hey, great job of expressing your feelings, your thoughts really speak here. I hope you enjoy it here and keep posting  "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Welcome to Passions Jocelyhn! We are very happy you have decided to join our community of poetry friendship. This is a lovely first post, filled with longing and questions of love, very nicely done. I hope to read more of your poetry and your responses to our wonderful family of poets! (check your e-mail for a special message) Best wishes, /Kit |
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