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DragonFang
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since 2000-03-09
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Missouri, USA

0 posted 2000-11-13 09:59 PM


A fire rages
Deep inside
Burning hotter and hotter
As it lays

Time goes by
The fire burns bright
Kept to a corner
But growing white

At its cage
It burns away
It's fiery rage
Waste it lays

"Sa souvraya niende missian ye." \
I am lost in my own mind.

© Copyright 2000 Samson C. Justice - All Rights Reserved
Dopey Dope
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1 posted 2000-11-13 10:20 PM


This was great. I loved how it was burning and then died in the end. Beautiful!



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

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jeremydraul
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since 2000-08-01
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State of Despair
2 posted 2000-11-13 10:41 PM


i like the symbolism of the fire as the feelings you have, great poem  

jeremy r

"...if you've never met me, then you've no right to judge me. I have a good heart, but this heart can get ugly." ~DMX~


DragonFang
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since 2000-03-09
Posts 522
Missouri, USA
3 posted 2000-11-14 08:24 AM


Thanks, glad that ya like it.

Ugh, I wish I had more time of late, heh, maybe I should just take a break from programming and read/write more poetry.  

"Sa souvraya niende missian ye." \
I am lost in my own mind.

Lakewalker
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On the streets w/ people
4 posted 2000-11-14 04:11 PM


I also think this one is great, it really is done well.  ...And I always suggest people take lots of breaks

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!!

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Lani_DarkOne
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since 2000-05-28
Posts 152
UK
5 posted 2000-11-14 04:46 PM


Yeah..can picture fire as rage..that dies, as fire does...great idea..I liked it..

"Controlling my feelings for too long....
And forcing our darkest souls to unfold...
And pushing us into self-destruction...."
*~Muse*~

DragonFang
Senior Member
since 2000-03-09
Posts 522
Missouri, USA
6 posted 2000-11-14 09:08 PM


Yeah, breaks are good, but I'm kinda said I'd try to get a working alpha of the CCS by the end of three weeks, and I've got the biggest part of it ahead of me, and a week and half left to work. And I as of yet to get a working algorythem for this part. Two more ideas then I'm gonna start playing around with using objects.

ANYWAY, I'll get off that Tangent, I'm glad you like the poem   always love to hear people like my work. Hopefully you'll be seeing a bit more of me 'round here soon.

"Sa souvraya niende missian ye." \
I am lost in my own mind.

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