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niceguy
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0 posted 2000-11-13 04:28 PM


I am new here and I'm not a very good writer...I especially suck at endings but I thought I post this and see if anyone liked it. This is about some of the things I was feeling when I was contemplating getting into another relationship with a girl after breaking up with my ex 3 months ago. Hope ya like it! On paper I had this arranged nicely but when I typed it out it didn't quite go as I had planned. Sorry it's so disorganized.

Uncertain

I know these feelings inside you are hard to ignore.
All your built in defences are telling you this won't work. Your heart yearns to be free...but is afraid of what may happen. There is something thats holding you back. You don't want this to end...but you don't want to hurt. Unsure if your heart can stand another break. For this to be you must decide...will you stay or will you go?



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curlygurly
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1 posted 2000-11-13 04:31 PM


This is awesome! That is something that eventually crosses your mind in a relationship, do i stay and not be happy or do i leave and break their heart. great way or expressing yourself  
Curly


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Lakewalker
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2 posted 2000-11-13 04:53 PM


I think you did a great job of telling your thoughts here!  So, how did you mess up the typing?   Good job on the poem, but I'd like to see how you'd arrange it

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3 posted 2000-11-13 06:17 PM


This is great!
I can see you're having a hard time with the women and well, i hope things turn out good. This was a good post......hope to see more of you!


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