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ZAOfreak
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since 2000-11-08
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0 posted 2000-11-12 07:16 PM


I wrote this poem when I was really angry with one of my friends. He was my best friend, and he didn't give me any support whatsoever for what I was trying to accomplish... in fact, he made it more difficult...


You...
You and your irreverence,
Are haunting me.
Your disregard for respect,
It cuts into me.
Why are you,
The way you are?
Don't you know in your position,
You won't get very far?

I have kindly requested,
For you to give me,
Just a little attention,
So others might see.
But you don't even care,
You turn your back on me.

You don't even consider,
What Jesus can do.
Take off your mask,
He wants to use you.

You...
My anger swells at the thought,
Of you.
Why can't you see?
The instructions are given,
We can set them free.
But you...

I can't change you,
You won't pull through.
Go smother yourself,
In your bliss ignorance,
Until you die.
I do not care anymore,
I know that's a lie.

© Copyright 2000 Forrest King - All Rights Reserved
Lakewalker
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since 2000-08-05
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1 posted 2000-11-12 08:44 PM


Hmmm, trouble with friends is never a good thing.  I hope they start being a real friend to you, otherwise they do not deserve the friendship you have to give.  Did you accomplish what you were trying to do or did he stop you?  Ok, my mind is spinning, I better just tell ya that you did a really good job on the poem and I hope he doesn't keep trying to hold you back

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!!

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2 posted 2000-11-12 09:49 PM


This was great. Trouble with friends is always hard. I hope things pull through though.
True friends are always there for you when you're in need.........good luck!



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Erin
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3 posted 2000-11-13 01:05 AM


I wouldnt care for that kind of friend...I mean arent best friends supposed to be there for one another and help them...I wish you the best in the decision you make with your friend...< !signature-->

~*Love is sometimes like a rose. Beautiful in the beginning but dies in the end.*~

[This message has been edited by ERIN (edited 11-13-2000).]

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4 posted 2000-11-13 10:46 AM


Wow these are definately powerful feelings that i can relate to. People arent perfect and he might not even realize what he's saying to you is effecting you or making things harder for you....he could be totally oblivious! But if he is doing this regaurdless..i think you should tell him how important this accomplishment is to you and ask if he can please respect that. I liked this poem a lot...great job hun!
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