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xShUgArHiGhx 
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Tickle me, Touch me, Sooth me, Love me, But please, Dont dont break my heart. Laugh with me, Cry with me, Live with me, Die with me, But i ask you, Please dont leave my side. Comfort me, Be with me, Care for me, Believe in me, But one favor, Please dont decieve my eyes. Show me, Prove to me, Display to me, Move me, One request, Give me a reason to believe you and i are right... |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This was a great poem. I thought you expressed yourself quite well and the style within it was great. I loved it!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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ZAOfreak Junior Member
since 2000-11-08
Posts 22CA, USA |
I say this way to much... but I feel for you. Too often those very requests that you asked for in your poem, are the things that those we love choose to neglect... a great poem. Good work. |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Hey, this is more than one request  But anyway, this poem is really good, it really tells your feelings well. Nicely done "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
hey it has a nice style. Your requests I think are what everything girl wants in a guy..i know those are the request i ask of.. ~Ina~ |
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curlygurly Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 276USA |
Great poem! i totally agree with your requests, although they never work. i mean really can guys ever not hurt us, whether intentionally or not. anyway i really liked your poem Curly "So many tears i've cried, so much pain inside" -Lenny Kravitz |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Shugar~ Good idea girl!!!Tell them like it is before you get attached to the guys...Good work!!! ~*Love is sometimes like a rose. Beautiful in the beginning but dies in the end.*~ |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Sorry I wanted to add this to my library!!! ~*Love is sometimes like a rose. Beautiful in the beginning but dies in the end.*~ |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
i really like this poem a lot. it's simple but stiill has a lot of meaning to it. keep it up I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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