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xShUgArHiGhx 
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
"Its an unhealthy relationship", Says numerous people to me. But their not living my life, How could they possibly see? I'd like to remind you all, Your not feeling with my heart. Your not seeing through my eyes, You havent been there from the start. He's seen me at my worst, My scariest, And most sad. He's seen me when i was happy, Extremely moody, And mad. He's stuck around through the obstacles, Never once thinking to give up. While everyone says, Its my mind he's choosing to corrupt. I'm not understanding, How can something good be so bad? Everyone has ups and downs, Periods of happiness and being sad. What makes us different, From every one of you? How are we unqiue? What do we do? You all say its unhealthy, For me to be with him. Regaurdless if he makes me happy, Deep down within. I have my moments where he makes me cry, Gives me yet another reason, To always wanting to die. I have my moments where he makes me glad, He's so loving and caring, And would give me every oounce of his happiness To take away my sad. There must be something, That i dont see. For you to be so forceful, When you tell me all those things, Are unhealthy. |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Interesting...in what way do they say the relationship is unhealthy? It's not clear in your poem. Well done by the way.  |
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Nikkisweet Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 183Tx, Dallas |
I can relate to this one. If I were you I wouldn't listen to what people say. They don't know all the details. It's your choice, but if your unhappy with him more than you are happy, then it does sound unhealthy. I really enjoyed reading this...each line kept making me want to read the next until it was finished. Good job! And I'm adding this one to my Library! ~Guys are like stars, there are millions of them, but only one can make you dreams come true~ |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Yea the unhealthy part in the poem is unclear but i did like the poem all together.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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curlygurly Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 276USA |
great poem, but could you come back and reply what the unhealthy part was.  Curly "So many tears i've cried, so much pain inside" -Lenny Kravitz |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Ok well i didnt mention the unhealthy part because its kind of hard to explain. Many people analyzed him as being emotionally abusive...like i have to put up a fight to hang with my friends and i feel bad about it, i always have to tell him i care...etc..its like being married...oy....so i hope you can understand what i'm getting at here. Basically their telling me he's not good for me and our relationship is unhealthy and making my life hard. I hope that cleared some things up for all of you! |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
You've expressed yourself well in this Shugar, and your note above did clarify the "unhealthy" part. I've sent a few thoughts your way via e-mail. Please take care, and know that friends, family, and even those of us here are always there to listen. Best wishes, /Kit |
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~*~PrettyGirly~*~ Member
since 2000-11-04
Posts 83Fitchburg Ma Usa |
Hi...No relationship unhealthy, unless you plan it that way. But when I talked to you threw an IM you sounded upbeat. My relationship wasn't that great but people siad Minna your no good for Dave. I never listened to them it was usless information, people say stuff to get you hurt but you can't let it bug you. Ignore them pretend they aren't even there, thats what I did for a year and half. But enough was done I had enough and people still say "Minna you weren't good enough for Dave, he never liked you." I still don't pay attention to them either should you. I hope my advise has helped you.. ~*~Princess Minna aka Pretty Girly~*~ If I could walk I'd be glad..But I'm glad the way I am- ~*~me~*~ |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I don't have any advice to give on this, but I'd just like to say that I think this is a good poem "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! http://www.thehungersite.com |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Thank you all for responding... Kit-- Thanks for the e-mail and you did do a good job on describing parts of my life. I appreciate it. Thanks again. |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
You are so welcome Shugar, and I just read your new poem "Not Missing You" ... I'm sooooo proud of you for taking a step and testing the waters. What a wonderful, positive attitude! Keep it up hon ... you are worth it!!!  Best wishes and hugs, /Kit |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
hey girl, i have one thing to say. I know you have all these bad feelings towards your friends, but do me one favor. At least keep what they tell you into consideration okay. I don't think they'd say something to hurt you if they're real friends. thanks for the beautiful read I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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