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Ponderings on Magenta Rainbow and the Stupidity Watermelon
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Ponderings on Magenta Rainbow and the Stupidity Watermelon |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI 
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M etronome swaying, A ging the G oblins, witches. Phantom E nters, shocking perfect plastic N ativity scene. T asteless passion stares A t metronome swaying. R aining, shining. A t once, appearing I nto the bleak skies. N everlasting, everlasting B eauty O vertaking beauty. W ho dissolved my rainbow? A t last! N ever has ended. D ear, here is T omorrow. H indering thoughts for E verlasting death. S teryotypical. T ossing, turning U gly words. P essimistic I gnorance. 'Tis the D rug of adolescence. I nterchanging faces lay T urmoil on our Y outh. W asting A way. Timeless T ears wander, E rupting over R age. M other, may I E at a slice? For L ife is my addiction. O nward march the N oble seedlings! < !signature--> A word is dead When it is said Some say. I say it just Begins to live That day. ~Emily Dickinson [This message has been edited by Child of the Stars (edited 11-11-2000).] |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
This is great, I like it  Nicely done acrostic (that's what this's called, right? i forget sometimes) "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Lani_DarkOne Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 152UK |
Intriguing...I like this line.. 'M other, may I E at a slice? For L ife is my addiction.' The whole style of it is thought-provoking.. "Controlling my feelings for too long.... And forcing our darkest souls to unfold... And pushing us into self-destruction...." *~Muse*~ |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
HOly mother of God! I loved this poem. The whole style of it.....the ending of it......everything of it was amazing! I loved it so much you can't imagine. EVERYBODY this girl think she sucks at poetry....she also finds herself to be inferior to a lot of people due to her "low" intellect!!!! DO YOU BELIEVE THIS?!?!?!?! I think you know otherwise that you are a great writer with tons of talent Great job!!!!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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curlygurly Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 276USA |
wow well this was quite an interesting poem, i think that dopey liked it lol. it was really good kinda different but still awesome. great work Curly "So many tears i've cried, so much pain inside" -Lenny Kravitz |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Thanks everyone.. Yup it's called acrostic. Dopey..lol...you're too cool. Thanks so much for making sure I don't bury myself into a deep pit of depression and self-pity. I'm glad ya liked it peeps. Stay cool. ~Carly A word is dead When it is said Some say, I say it just Begins to live That day. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
WOW!!! This is really good, I am totally speechless. "S teryotypical. T ossing, turning U gly words. P essimistic I gnorance. 'Tis the D rug of adolescence. I nterchanging faces lay T urmoil on our Y outh." This line holds the truth to life. BRAVO!!! I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
This was really creative...Good job on it...2 thumbs up for you for creativity!!! ~*Love is sometimes like a rose. Beautiful in the beginning but dies in the end.*~ |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Heh thanks peeps. ~Carly A word is dead When it is said Some say, I say it just Begins to live That day. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
See Carly.......we love yoU!!!!! I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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aurora rain Member
since 2000-11-15
Posts 90 |
normally i hate those things...but you made it lovely. very nice. |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
I think this is one of your best poems I have ever read, Carly. The title is outstanding, the message, the way it travelled from one word to the other and the topic also followed suit, this would have to be the best acrostic I have ever read! I'm so adding it to my library. ~Allan Its rather handy being at the top of the food chain...you can sort things out and not get the blame for it. ~~Elizabeth Johnson (anonymousfemale) |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Awwwwwwwwwww........thank youuuu ~Carly Many miles behind my eyelashes, there always seems to be |
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