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Jenn Cirrincione
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0 posted 2000-11-11 10:08 AM


I've been looking at you from this view,
blinded by a glare.
Staring at the masses,
Wondering why is life so odd?

I've had a shallow outlook,
for just way too long.
I'm now yearning for a way to change,
fix the things that have gone wrong.

I've hated you; I've loved you,
for reasons just too many.
Never understanding why I should feel either.
Never understanding, just floating through the day.

Now I'm going to try, to look at you anew.
To fix the way my life has travelled,
to alter what has gone astray.
I will now try to know... the difference between existing...and living my life.

© Copyright 2000 Jennifer Parker - All Rights Reserved
Lani_DarkOne
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1 posted 2000-11-11 10:45 AM


Profound...I completely agree with the difference between 'existing' and 'living'..
'Never understanding just floating through the day'..I bet ALOT of people do that.

Hope you find what you're looking for..


"Controlling my feelings for too long....
And forcing our darkest souls to unfold...
And pushing us into self-destruction...."
*~Muse*~

Lakewalker
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2 posted 2000-11-11 01:21 PM


Wow, this is great, you expressed this so well.  The poem is great and so is the attitude you've shown, trying to start over and take control of your life.

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!!

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3 posted 2000-11-11 03:59 PM


take the bull by the thorns and call it susy!!! You go girl!!

great poem!



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!


Tia
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4 posted 2000-11-11 11:32 PM


this is a very good poem. i like the phrase "i will now try to know the difference between existing and living my life." i try to make the difference between living and just existing but it always seems that all i do is exist.good poem.

Tia

I'd rather have someone hate me for who i am,than to have someone like me for who i'm pretending to be

My theory is that I might die at any moment.

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5 posted 2000-11-27 04:54 PM


"I will now try to know... the difference between existing...and living my life"

What more can i say.  Your way with words is simply amazing  

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR


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6 posted 2000-11-27 05:05 PM


I simply HAVE to ask your permission to print this poem and if you say no I'll be reaaaallllly sad!!!   lol. Wow...I loved this so much. Every line held so much truth and insight, and the last line...wow...so profound. Mind if I put it up on my homepage under quotes?
KEEP WRITING!
~Kandi

~*Won't you come and hold my hand?
This world has taken me as far as it can...
without your smile.~*

~*If I never said I'm sorry, then I'm wrong,

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7 posted 2000-11-27 05:46 PM


Thank you so much Acire, for your kind comments!
And Kandi... I'd never say no! It's a huge compliment, by all means print it! You know this means I'll have to visit your homepage to see my work!!     
And to everybody else who has replied... I appreciate it more than you could know! Thanks!
xoxo
Jenn
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"Guess I'm not smart, I let you un-nerve me, I let you control me; afraid the truth would hurt me, when it's you that hurts me more." TLC

[This message has been edited by Jenn Cirrincione (edited 11-27-2000).]

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8 posted 2000-11-28 12:26 PM


  
   Hey, this was so great!! It's goin in my faves...  

  ~Carly

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9 posted 2000-11-28 03:32 PM


Thanks child! That means a lot!  
xoxo
Jenn


"Guess I'm not smart, I let you un-nerve me, I let you control me; afraid the truth would hurt me, when it's you that hurts me more." TLC

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10 posted 2000-11-28 07:35 PM


I too am very impressed with it. As with many other people that replied, the last line sums it up the best.
"I will now try to know... the difference between existing...and living my life."
                 Awesome
                                          Jon

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11 posted 2000-11-28 08:51 PM


Thank you Jon... that was a very nice compliment. I appreciate it.  
xoxo
Jenn


"Guess I'm not smart, I let you un-nerve me, I let you control me; afraid the truth would hurt me, when it's you that hurts me more." TLC

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12 posted 2001-05-16 10:27 PM


Jenn,
WoW!  That last verse was awsome.  Very well penned.  I'm glad I came back to read this one.  I loved it
Jason

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13 posted 2001-12-10 11:21 AM


"Now I'm going to try, to look at you anew.
To fix the way my life has travelled,
to alter what has gone astray.
I will now try to know... the difference between existing...and living my life"

Wouldn't it be nice if everyone could fix what has gone astray? It'd be a bloody good Christmas present that's for sure.

Once again, another great piece. Keep writing!

~AF~

"When I eat I feel. It is better if I don't feel, I am too afraid." - Ellen West

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