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Making Oneself at Home
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Making Oneself at Home |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair 
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Before you read, you may need an explanation, which is that this about relaxing and forgetting about your problems, we all need to rewind now and then.  I also tried to use different rhyme schemes.When you get tired, weak or just need a rest Go to a place, a comfortable cave, or cozy nest All you need is water, it’ll replenish your spirit For a moment, just think that you’re able to bare it Time is futile to perceive, throw out your clock Forget to set the alarm, your judgment will wake you If not, always remember at your door, it will knock Unconscious actions, they overwhelm what you do Lay your head, down upon a pillow of this trust A strange man tells you, “Don’t forget about me.” “I’ve nothing to remember”, you softly reply Your brain sees freedom, the worries are now rust Things you never let leave, wandered away scared Ignoring them helped, but will they ever return? Signals ahead cast shadows of guilt, they shall burn A new man has found light in this darkened world Jeremy Raulinaitis 11/11/00 .... let us pray for our veterans ... "...if you've never met me, then you've no right to judge me. I have a good heart, but this heart can get ugly." ~DMX~ |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Excellent! And thank you for the note at the end of your poem.  |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Jeremy, I like this one, sometimes we do have to just leave the world to relax. Good job I really like this part, sometimes I feel I run my life based on my watch:"Time is futile to perceive, throw out your clock Forget to set the alarm, your judgment will wake you" And veterans certainly deserve our prayers today, and everyday. We wouldn't be here without them. < !signature--> "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! http://www.thehungersite.com [This message has been edited by Lakewalker (edited 11-11-2000).] |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Great post!!! Wonderful poem jeremy!!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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curlygurly Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 276USA |
great poem jeremy. and veterans are worthy of our gratitude. great post! Curly "So many tears i've cried, so much pain inside" -Lenny Kravitz |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Amazing jeremy!!!Keep it up buddy!!! And the veterans always deserve to get our prayers... ~*Love is sometimes like a rose. Beautiful in the beginning but dies in the end.*~ |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
thanks for all the replies and respect to ur vet's. I hope to hear more of these.. jeremy r "...if you've never met me, then you've no right to judge me. I have a good heart, but this heart can get ugly." ~DMX~ |
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