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Now I Know Why
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Now I Know Why |
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Rhiannon Member
since 1999-07-28
Posts 95Fayetteville, TN USA |
Life's a pity, what a crying shame To get back up just to fall again I wish I could get out of this But whenever I look back I see your face and I laugh Thinking of what we used to have And then I look ahead and cry Now I know why Being in the present isn't as fun As realizing that I was the only one Who meant anything to you Feeling like this makes it all seem trivial But so encompassing Waiting For the future to replace what I've lost Not knowing that all there is to give I've already known Already known But bitterness is just a game I've played and lived it just the same As you did back then Afraid of what I see In the mirror I believe That all that shines once was gold I was gold When I was in your arms Now the tarnish shows through I wish I was you But whenever I look back I see your face and I laugh And then I look ahead and cry Now I know why- The night is my companion The solitude my guide Would I spend forever here And not be satisfied? Sarah MacLachlan, "Possession" |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Hey. I really liked this. "But bitterness is just a game I've played and lived it just the same" I really liked that part. Great job..and good luck with life and the hardships that come along with it. ~Carly< !signature--> I believe you don't know what you've got until you say goodbye. [This message has been edited by Child of the Stars (edited 11-10-2000).] |
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DreamerGrl27 Member
since 2000-10-29
Posts 142 |
This poem was really good...I loved the part when you said that everything that shines was once gold...it's true. Sometimes its scary looking ahead, but just remember that everything will get better. |
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Rhiannon Member
since 1999-07-28
Posts 95Fayetteville, TN USA |
Thank you everyone for your lovely responses  The night is my companion The solitude my guide Would I spend forever here And not be satisfied? Sarah MacLachlan, "Possession" |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
"But whenever I look back I see your face and I laugh And then I look ahead and cry Now I know why" I really liked how you worded the ending, and the whole poem is very good. Great job "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Great poem! I love your style and how you word things. You have much talent!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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