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Dopey Dope
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0 posted 2000-11-08 05:20 PM


Love Denied:


Your lips, sweet lips
That I have kissed.
Sweet as honey dew,
And soft as silk.

Under the moon shine.
Our stand still love line.
Your lovely touch, gentle grace
Trembling my body forever more.

A soul, your soul I see.
Murmur of truth, love me!
I gaze upon shivering shadow move.
Wisked away from unrequited love.





I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!


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Kit McCallum
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1 posted 2000-11-09 06:23 AM


"A soul, your soul I see.
Murmur of truth, love me!"

"Wisked away from unrequited love."

Tender sentiments from you in this lovely verse Javier, its sets a very gentle and wistful mood, nicely done!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

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2 posted 2000-11-09 03:41 PM


Dopey, very very very good job on this one.  The feelings in it seemed so sincere, good job on the poem!

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!!

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LyricFetish
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3 posted 2000-11-09 03:52 PM


Most impressive! I didn't know you had a sappy side.........j/k. I like it, dude.

*~Meredith~*

I'll just keep on laughing,
Hiding the tears in my eyes...
*Oleander

Dopey Dope
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4 posted 2000-11-12 05:53 PM


I'm glad you liked it and all but i think this sappy, love poem deserves some more posts haha.....hardly ever do i write things like this.



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!


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5 posted 2000-11-12 06:22 PM


yeah, i looked at the title and was like WHOA! Dopey hardly ever writes poems that have really much love in them lol but hey dope this is pretty damn good. And thanks for the reply on my poem your always the one to help

"put the name of the person u love, not in a heart because they alway break but put it in a circle which last forever"



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6 posted 2000-11-12 07:20 PM



  Hey. Sniff sniff..so good, so good...

  ~Carly

A word is dead
When it is said
Some say,
I say it just
Begins to live
That day.

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