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I Cry
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I Cry |
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branden726 
since 2000-09-25
Posts 607Bay City, MI 
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I Cry I sit here and think of you, The way you smile at me, It all makes me cry, I love you so much but find it hard to trust, Its not your fault its just that everytime i get close to someone i get burned, So i sit here and I Cry, You tell me you love me and what happens, You see this tear in my eye, You pull me close tell me you'll never let go, I still sit here and cry, I think its all a lie, Someone help me! I cry, Its all a lie You left me What now? I told you everytime i get close, The get farther away. It was love at first site, For me! I cry cuz i lost everything i once had, You wont even look at me now, What did i do? Try to love you, Yeah all the people that you may think you love mite not ever love you back. |
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Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
branden, i like this poem very much. Keep writing!  Morning rain fell on my window, and I can't see at all. Even if I could it would all be gray, put your picture on my wall, it reminds me that it's not |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Hey well this was great, but i found that the attitude of this poem quickly changes from you loving this girl and the girl loving you ........and you not believeing it into this weird like.......oh she doesnt love you anymore and thats that It was kinda quick for me....lost me at some point. great nonetheless though!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
You know, I don't think I can really give advice on this situation, if you even wanted any. But the poem was good, it was well expressed, as always "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! http://www.thehungersite.com |
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branden726
since 2000-09-25
Posts 607Bay City, MI |
I wanted to make this seem like a sweet poem with a twist and thats what ive done i think it sounds great 2! no i dont need n e advice it seems once again ive kinda tricked ppl in on thinking im upset but i just felt like writting "put the name of the person u love, not in a heart because they alway break but put it in a circle which last forever" |
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Yankee10n20BFF Junior Member
since 2000-11-02
Posts 27T-Town, AL |
I thought this poem expressed a lot of feelings in it. I have been through some stuff like this but it was just friendships. Don't give up on love just because someone else hurt you. THEY are the ones who don't deserve it. You sound like a great guy and I hope you find your true love! Yankee No matter what you are going through, all you have to do is close your eyes and dream cause no one can take them away from you. |
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branden726
since 2000-09-25
Posts 607Bay City, MI |
Thanks yank, your not the only one who's told me that ive had girls come out to me and ask me to go out with them cuz i look sweet and they see how i act i mean ill do n e thing for a girl i try to be a perfect gentlemen like opening doors and all that stuff for girls or lisa (my gf) i am sweet but it seems to get me nowhere. "put the name of the person u love, not in a heart because they alway break but put it in a circle which last forever" |
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