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0 posted 2000-11-07 12:28 PM



You talk about my feelings,
And their insignificance grows.
You say that you care more,
And the words "I miss you" are barely told.
I cant express enough to you,
How much i care.
Regaurdless of my efforts,
You say my heart isnt there.
My best isnt good enough,
Why havent i learned?
You care, love, and miss me more,
We dont take turns.
What is your problem?
Why is it so hard to see?
That all the feelings you have,
I feel back equally?
I cant express it to you,
Anymore than i know how.
You make my feelings,
Feel so insignificant.
So what do i do now?

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1 posted 2000-11-07 12:33 PM


Hey once again another great poem. You know your not insignificant! I don't know about your man though. I hope he realizes that he can't demand so much. Some people just express themselves dif. but that doesn't mean that they care less about their partner.
Anyway another great poem!



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2 posted 2000-11-07 03:59 PM


I really liked the flow of this, it just seemed so natural.  It sounds like he's too demanding but I don't want to form a judgement based on just one poem, so maybe I shouldn't even type it at all.  But I'm lazy and don't want to go back to erase it, so I'll just leave it.  Ok, anyway, great job of expressing these feelings, the poem is very good

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3 posted 2000-11-07 07:03 PM


this was a great poem! i liked the way your feelings were raw and abrupt, it shows you have courage. if the relationship continues, i say leave. you shouldn't be hurt more than you already have  
Curly


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4 posted 2000-11-10 02:05 PM


Talk to him about it.  And if he still complains, maybe someone else deserves you love.  Great writing.  Thanks for sharing

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5 posted 2000-11-10 03:18 PM


I have had this same experience and you need to talk about it. I gave it my all, but it wasn't enough. I tried to talk and she just kept taking advantage of my sympathy. I finally told her that she had to figure out what she wanted and to call me when she did. This was heart breaking and I still haven't heard from her. Everyone swears I will. If he is important to you, tell him.
                                         Jon

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