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Morouxshi San
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0 posted 2000-11-06 12:24 PM


-=About a Raver=-

great, im talking to a raver...
i just want to go home...
i want nothing to do with this world.
not fair, is it?

ack im talking to a raver.
always with their artificial fun.
brought by artificial highs.
through artificial pills.

damn, im talking to a raver.
has it been that long?
its probably that im sober.
and, well, shes not.

-Morouxshi San


San, the wise
San, the dumb
San, the guy...

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1 posted 2000-11-06 01:29 AM


Great job san, you know this is not one of your best, but like you said "what's the worst they'll say? LIke they did to you ....oh javier your poem didnt make me think!"

so hehehe......there you go. I was going to try and quote you on that, but the icq history messed up on me!



"I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust."

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!

Morouxshi San
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2 posted 2000-11-06 06:52 AM


its really my fault that its not that good.
i just did it while talking to you...
so where i wrote it was in your message...


San, the wise
San, the dumb
San, the guy...

Lakewalker
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3 posted 2000-11-06 03:07 PM


I guess I don't get the whole connection of talking to a river.  But it's monday and I'm tired and I don't even know if there's even something to get.  But anyway, "wow, this made me think".  ha, sorry, um, keep posting for us

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4 posted 2000-11-07 12:56 PM


San, Why would you ever talk to a river?!?!
Hahahahahahahahahahahaha!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

OK no seriously folks.....the poem is about a RAVER. People who go to RAVES...parties with lots of drugs, mainly XTC.



"I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust."

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!

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5 posted 2000-11-07 05:48 PM


are you saying you dont like us ravers or what?we don;t all get high on XTC....but most of us do...well it was kool because it was like it was honest because i know alot of people are like that when they talk to me and i say i rave.....wtv
~Ina~

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6 posted 2000-11-07 06:18 PM


I think this shows how tired I was, I totally read river, not raver.  Wow, that's bad.  I don't think I should stop by here when I'm tired anymore    nope, I'll come when I'm alive and awake    ...sorry bout that San.  Maybe someday i'll learn how to read    Ok, but anyway, yeah, good job
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7 posted 2000-11-07 06:28 PM


Thanks for that added piece there dopey lol. Great poem san it was pretty cool. Ravers aren't that bad i guess, not like i'm one, pretty much the opposite. anyway great poem!  
Curly


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8 posted 2000-11-07 08:11 PM



  Hey. Sowwy I couldn't reply to this earlier. Anyways, it wuz purdy kewlll. Haha. Great job man.

  ~Carly

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9 posted 2000-11-08 01:20 AM


Lake, I was on icq and replies to the poem and was just chilling. Then san tells me that you thought the poem was about a river. I couldn't stop laughing my head off. That was probably the funniest thing all week. Hahahaha......A river.....phew you musta been tired! haha......



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!


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10 posted 2000-11-08 01:18 PM


hahaha, glad I could amuse you.  Will this ever be forgotten?

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!!

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11 posted 2000-11-08 01:56 PM


Could what ever be forgotten? <---- forgotten



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!


Morouxshi San
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12 posted 2000-11-09 01:01 PM


wow, eleven replies so far...

lake, its ok, you said you were tired, nothing to worry bout...  

Ina, i have no problem with ravers, actually some of my closest friends are ravers, but the poem is about this one girl i met, to tell you the most i thought she was boring.
therefore the part with atificial highs and stuff... (thanks for the confesion though)  

isnt dope the greatest? he explained it and everything!...

-San


San, the wise
San, the dumb
San, the guy...

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