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Tamma
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0 posted 2000-11-05 05:06 PM



~*~ Make Love to Me ~*~

Take my hand . . . kiss it,
Take my heart . . . don’t break it,
Make love to me.

Kiss my lips  . . . look in my eyes,
Feel my heartbeat . . . look into my soul,
Make love to me.

Talk to me . . . let me feel your love,
Touch my face . . . let me know its true.
Make love to me.

Hold me close . . . protect my soul,
Under God’s eye . . . we made a vow,
Make love to me.

(Was this too graphic?)
(sorry, God just had to be capitalized)
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If you love someone dont put their name in a heart,
put their name in a circle, because a heart can be broken
but a circle is continious.




[This message has been edited by Tamma (edited 11-05-2000).]

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1 posted 2000-11-05 05:10 PM


This wasn't too graphic at all. it was awesome. Great Poem  
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2 posted 2000-11-05 05:17 PM


This isn't graphic at all! I think it very sweet and well-written. I'm glad that you want to make a vow to God before you do anything like this!  

PS- You should always capitalize God... He deserves it!

False gems may shine as brightly as the genuine article, but there are always those who can tell the difference.



Tamma
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3 posted 2000-11-05 05:21 PM


Heh....I guess the Title got everyones attention  

Thanks

If you love someone dont put their name in a heart,
put their name in a circle, because a heart can be broken
but a circle is continious.



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4 posted 2000-11-05 05:26 PM


Strong poem
Big decision
Make sure it's the right one



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Caz
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5 posted 2000-11-05 07:33 PM


Great poem Tamma, I'm so happy for you, especially for the Vow... ohhh.. and God MUST be capitalized always, He really deserves it.

ps: The tittle is very good lol  

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6 posted 2000-11-05 07:36 PM


The title?  Definite attention grabber.  I agree with Dopey though.  Anyway, good poem, good luck, keep it up
Bel

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7 posted 2000-11-05 11:29 PM


ok, I'm on my way
ha ha just kidding.
this is a good poem
the title really does grab attention.
it's not so graphic.
it's not like the adult forum stuff or anything. this is good

Tamma
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8 posted 2000-11-06 08:40 AM


First of all, thank you all for replying, yanno it only took me about 5 mins to write this, cause I had the words flying thru my mind all weekend, but I couldnt write it down   I was away, and fergot my Journal. Heh, and after writing the whole thing down, the title was obvious

                  

If you love someone dont put their name in a heart,
put their name in a circle, because a heart can be broken
but a circle is continious.



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9 posted 2000-11-06 02:51 PM


This title certainly got my attention   I like this a lot, great job on it

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10 posted 2000-11-07 11:01 AM


first of all, God always has to be capitalized whether you say He or Him, as long as it's pertaining to Him. Secondly, simple but sweet poem.  That make love to me part has me confused though.  Did you mean it in a different way or what most people think it is?  Great job again Tamma.  keep sharing

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Tamma
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11 posted 2000-11-07 11:05 AM


I think different people see it as many different things...the way I meant it was, just what I said in the poem.



If you love someone dont put their name in a heart,
put their name in a circle, because a heart can be broken
but a circle is continious.



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