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Isabel Galaxia
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since 2000-06-18
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0 posted 2000-11-05 12:12 PM


Planned

I had it all planned out in my head
From my cunning smile
To what you'd have said
I knew the time
I knew the place
I knew all the details
Even the expression on your face
I planned what I'd have said
Maybe I'd make you mad
And your face would turn red
Maybe I'd make you feel bad
Like you know you should
Maybe I'd make you sad
I really hoped I would
About three months since I've last seen you
Not much about you changed
Your skin a little darker
Your hair shorter and rearranged
Even now
You still have that tone
That condescending attitude
I wish I hadn't known
I don't hate you
I'm not so low
I should just give it up
These feelings often show
Funny
It's almost like I wanted to compensate
for the pain you caused her
No matter how many months ago
The scar's engraved upon her
A hundred times
I had it all planned out in my head
But you simply glanced over
And said "hello" instead

~ Hi there, let me breifly explain.  I'm sick of writing about myself, so I wrote this about my best friend's ex.  And I know there's a certain person out there who might read it and say "oh no not again, when will she give it up?"  Well, person, just bear with me here.  I saw her ex at a football game the other day, I knew he'd be there, and we had elaborate responses to what we thought he'd ask.  All he did was give me a look and say "hello."  Well that's about it, sorry it sucks so bad!~


[This message has been edited by Isabel Galaxia (edited 11-05-2000).]

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Lakewalker
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1 posted 2000-11-05 01:01 PM


I don't think this sucks, in fact I'd say it's pretty good.  Good writing, keep it up     ....oh, and plans never seem to work out, do they!< !signature-->

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!!

[This message has been edited by Lakewalker (edited 11-05-2000).]

Dopey Dope
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2 posted 2000-11-05 04:29 PM


This was great......a little tribute to your friends personal life is always nice. Keep it up!



"I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust."

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Erin
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since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527
~Chicago~
3 posted 2000-11-05 04:51 PM


Isabel~Its good to see you posting more poems...I thought that this was really good...So dont think it sucks cuz it doesnt...

~*Love is sometimes like a rose. Beautiful in the beginning but dies in the end.*~

curlygurly
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since 2000-09-12
Posts 276
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4 posted 2000-11-05 05:03 PM


it doesn't suck. and i really wish he had asked because i'd like to have had my date rubbed in his face, even if it was just my buddy not an actual date. like his "10 girls that liked him" that was BULL cuz he never went out with any. well i really liked this one, it hit close to home, lol  
Me


"So many tears i've cried, so much pain inside"
-Lenny Kravitz


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5 posted 2000-11-05 05:36 PM


It's good to see you back!  

I know what it's like, you plan everything out, and when it's time to do it... everything changes. It's happened to me a thousand times, and it never gets any better. You describe it well. Keep up the great work!

False gems may shine as brightly as the genuine article, but there are always those who can tell the difference.



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6 posted 2000-11-10 01:25 PM


I hope you've learned that if you have bad intentions, you never win, whatever the situation.  Thanks for the read.  And hey, this doesn't suck.  Just don't plan anything bad again

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR


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