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Jose Marti Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 374washing DC |
this would be the ending of the book a torpedo strikes a wooden hull, an attack from the murky waters of this dark sea. the explosion sinks an ancient gallion into the murky depths. a sea of ingnorant forgotten obscurity as it burns on the water, smoke and flames rise, to escape the depths These are seen from afar, and the gallion lives on. [This message has been edited by Jose Marti (edited 11-05-2000).] |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Stupenderific!!! I loved it. It will suit the book perfectly, I'm sure. I liked the way the beginning and the ending contrast like that, it be kickin. Stay cool! ~Carly [This message has been edited by Child of the Stars (edited 11-05-2000).] |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Well, now you have a start and a finish, how about the middle?  Nice ending."Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Yea this was a great view of your intro and conclusion of your book. Got any in-betweeners to share?  "I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust." I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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curlygurly Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 276USA |
This would be the perfect ending to the book. it would go well with the intro. great poem! Curly "So many tears i've cried, so much pain inside" -Lenny Kravitz |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
Hey that's great. So you've got the begging...end...just got the middle to do now right? lol nice job keep it up  Bel |
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Jose Marti Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 374washing DC |
thanx guys I'm still working on the content of the book. basically it's be everything I've posted or writen that enough people liked |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Did I miss the start? Did you post it before? I'd like to know so could go back and read it I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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