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Child of the Stars
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0 posted 2000-11-03 09:40 PM


After having to 'face reality' much too often in the past little while, I'm wishin for my fantasy world back...but it seems to be lost forever..so yeah...enjoy...

Fantasy, oh Fantasy
Without you I cannot be
Alive, for true reality
Will never get its grip on me.
Fantasy, sweet Fantasy
I live in dreams, so I shall be
The Princess of my fairy tree
From now until eternity.
Fantasy, my Fantasy
If I ask you to marry me
You'll not refuse and say that we
Shall never love so truthfully!

© Copyright 2000 Carly Anne Van Dort - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2000-11-03 10:14 PM


Child~
This was really cute...Thanks for sharing it...


~*Love is sometimes like a rose. Beautiful in the beginning but dies in the end.*~

Morouxshi San
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2 posted 2000-11-03 10:29 PM


I think this was a very good poem, and Stars dont worry reality isnt really THAT bad after all...  


San, the wise
San, the dumb
San, the guy...

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3 posted 2000-11-03 11:53 PM


Hey this was really great. The rhyme scheme kicks butt and im glad to have read it. I too love the fantasy world. THIS KICKED BUTT!



"I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust."

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!

sweetstuff101
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4 posted 2000-11-04 01:35 AM


Hey that was really cute!! I liked it!! Keep up the great work!

Luv,
~*~Sweetstuff~*~
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~*~ YeStErDaY iS tHe PaSt, 2mOrRoW iS ThE fUtUrE, ToDaY iS a GiFt, ThAt'S wHy We CaLl iT ThE pReSeNt. ~*~

[This message has been edited by sweetstuff101 (edited 11-04-2000).]

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5 posted 2000-11-04 09:42 AM


This is a great poem. I know what it's like to live in a dream, and the horrible feeling when it comes crashing down. I hope you never stop dreaming!  

False gems may shine as brightly as the genuine article, but there are always those who can tell the difference.



Caz
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6 posted 2000-11-04 12:19 PM




It's been raining since you left me.

curlygurly
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7 posted 2000-11-04 02:27 PM


This was really good. Great poem  
Curlz


"So many tears i've cried, so much pain inside"
-Lenny Kravitz


curlygurly
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8 posted 2000-11-04 02:28 PM


This was really good. Great poem  
Curlz


"So many tears i've cried, so much pain inside"
-Lenny Kravitz


curlygurly
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9 posted 2000-11-04 02:28 PM


This was really good. Great poem  
Curlz


"So many tears i've cried, so much pain inside"
-Lenny Kravitz


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10 posted 2000-11-04 02:44 PM


Curly liked this so much she posted up 3 times!!!!!!!!
WAH00!!!!!!




"I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust."

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!

Child of the Stars
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11 posted 2000-11-04 03:33 PM


  
    LOL!! It's so good to be loved!!! Thanks so much everyone!! Specially curlz!! lol. Thanks again guys..

  ~Carly

Forever has ended, and never came too soon...

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12 posted 2000-11-05 11:48 AM


Sometimes we need a little fantasy in our lives, nicely done, I like it  < !signature-->

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!!

[This message has been edited by Lakewalker (edited 11-05-2000).]

Caz
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13 posted 2000-11-05 01:07 PM




It's been raining since you left me.

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14 posted 2000-11-06 05:32 PM


It's not bad to dream once in a while, but you're gonna have to face reality one of these days.  That's the way life goes i guess, it may not be perfect, it may not be kind, but at least it helps us grow to become better individuals.   keep ya head up

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR


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