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Rocky (relationship poem plz reply)
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Rocky (relationship poem plz reply) |
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branden726 
since 2000-09-25
Posts 607Bay City, MI 
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ROCKY Rocky is the word i describe as being my life, Rocky is the word i use when i think of our realationship, You hide everything from me, You seem so sad sometimes and it makes me mad, In so way you make it seem like i always do something bad, But when i ask you, You say nothing nothing at all, I wish you would learn, I love you i truly do, If i was to loose you i would not want to live, The hell that would just kill, Yeah,we get in fights sometimes and were only 15, Well Rocky would be the word i would not like to use at all, Just always remember love without fun, is marriage and thats not what i want. Rocky is not good at all just lets pick this up and brush our knees off cus that fall sure did hurt. I dont like this one that much i dont know its just hard to write right now. "put the name of the person u love, not in a heart because they alway break but put it in a circle which last forever" |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
This line seemed funny to me: "Just always remember love without fun, is marriage and thats not what i want." It seems like a lot of married couples would disagree with your view on this! But still, good job on this  "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I liked it but totally disagree with you on the marriage part. The only people who say things like that or think things like that are people with lack of hope for marriage. Either divorced couples, kids from a divorced family, or kids who just don't want to get married because it "ties you down". I mean, i think marriage is this magical bond between two individuals out of pure, and honorable love. I'm a sucker for that stuff, i think we have to give happy couples the benefit of a doubt. But great job all together.  "I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust." I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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curlygurly Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 276USA |
this was actually a good poem. and i can totally understand where ur girlfriend is coming from, i used to do the same thing. and as the marriage part goes, don't think of it as a relationship without fun. marriage is something that if both partners work for, it can be a lifetime of happiness. if not it becomes a tragedy. but it was a great poem Curlz "So many tears i've cried, so much pain inside" -Lenny Kravitz |
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branden726
since 2000-09-25
Posts 607Bay City, MI |
The part about marriage part it was just all fun and games something that came to mind i mean i didnt mean it i cant wait till i get married and everything and no my parents are together so thats not why i said that either it was just somethin that came to mind "put the name of the person u love, not in a heart because they alway break but put it in a circle which last forever" |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Branden~ You said "Yeah,we get in fights sometimes and were only 15,"...It doesnt matter how old you are...As long as you got something to argue about... ~*Love is sometimes like a rose. Beautiful in the beginning but dies in the end.*~ |
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branden726
since 2000-09-25
Posts 607Bay City, MI |
Hey erin, Yeah i guess thats true but what i meant by that is, We are just 15 we dont really need to fight cuz if we fight now i mean look how bad it would probably be way worse in 10yrs if were still together thats what i meant.. "put the name of the person u love, not in a heart because they alway break but put it in a circle which last forever" |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
A wonderful piece. I don't know why you don't like it so much. Just the married part, i don't agree with that. Thanks for the read and keep sharing I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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branden726
since 2000-09-25
Posts 607Bay City, MI |
Now that i look back to what i said i kinda figured i offended some of you. Well im sorry im just a kid and i also thought about it i see lots of married couples having fun its just i see more married ppl having trouble then i do fun and thats where i got that so thanks for the reply |
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