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Dopey Dope
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0 posted 2000-10-31 03:43 PM


NOTE: Just in case....this is a dialogue between Soul and Life...


Life Convincing the Soul:


"Hello, Mr. Life" said Soul,
"Pardon me if I ask,
But aren't you the one that told me
To take things slow, not fast?"

"Ah yes, Soul" said Life,
"I did mean to inform
That things are taken slow
Unless a time gap torn."

"And if a time gap torn" said Soul,
"What does it all mean?
That you rush your way of day,
And subdue to the time feind?"

"Ah yes, Soul" said Life,
"Reform your unhealthy ways.
It's all that you can do
In conformist society days."


"I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust."

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!

© Copyright 2000 Pepe de la Muerte - All Rights Reserved
Ina
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1 posted 2000-10-31 06:23 PM


hey Javier,
wow, i really liked the way u wrote it in the form of a dialogue between life and the soul. to very importtant things....i was curious is there antipathy bettween them?...umm well whatever....very,awesome poem!!
check ya later
~Ina~

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2 posted 2000-10-31 06:32 PM



  Hey Javi. This was really neato!! Heh, extremely creative idea. I loved it!! Stay koo, man. Ciao.

  ~Carly

The grindstone of life will either polish us or wear us down, depending on what we're made of.


keoni
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3 posted 2000-10-31 07:09 PM


This is an extremely creative idea. Writing this is the form of a dialogue is very unique. It describes our feelings in a whole new way. Very Cool
                                Keoni

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4 posted 2000-11-01 08:09 AM


Dopey, that was interesting. Kind of reminded me of what goes on inside my head. Anyways, I loved it!!! Love ya!!! Allysa

Don't wander throught this glassy surface, expecting to find more than me, because what I am without a purpose, but a lone mirage to see.

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5 posted 2000-11-01 08:26 AM


This was really creative Dopey!!!

~*Love is sometimes like a rose. Beautiful in the beginning but dies in the end.*~

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6 posted 2000-11-01 02:36 PM


I don't know that I've ever read a poem in this forum that used dialouge, I like it   Very creative, and very well done!

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!!

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7 posted 2000-11-02 05:24 PM


Im glad you all liked how it was written in dialogue, but have you delved within the message or the meaning of this? Cuz all im getting is "creative poem".....i don't know. This whole thing has meaning to it....i hope somebody delves within it.....if not....ok with me!
hehe



"I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust."

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!

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