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Words_of_Glitter
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0 posted 2000-10-30 01:22 PM


I Should've known what I was getting myself into
You had told me, "I got burned once, so now I try to stay outside the ring of fire."
But I couldn't surpass the chance to be with you...
Couldn't quench my desire
So, in such short time, I drank as much of you as I could and ate whatever lies you fed me
You treated me as if I were someone you cared for, but then obviously misled me
And you had said, "It's not that I don't care for you, but it's not something I want to do."
Then, don't play games with my heart and make me fall for you.
I was never one to get serious. Always dropped 'em when I saw the slightest flaw
I thought I was better off alone...but now I realize that I never knew what "alone" felt like at all
You didn't want to stay with me, but you knew how bad it would hurt if I left
Because when Melissa broke your heart, she left you so bereft
But my name isn't Melissa and I appreciate you for who you are
I'm glancing over your flaws, yet seeing that love is hard
I thought that I would never be able to understand the position that you were in
Never understand the way you just wanted life to end
I tried to get you to explain whatever it was that you were feeling
That way maybe you could understand it yourself and it'd give you a different way of dealing
But you said there weren't words to describe the pain you felt when you realized she was gone
And you still don't understand it, even though she's moved on
But maybe I can help you out, help you put it into words
To let you know that I know how it feels and to let myself be heard
"When someone hurts you, in that way, it feels like there is a hollow space in your chest that has too much air inside that is trying to get out. It feels weird to breathe whenever I just think of your name. It's restricting and compressing and you want nothing more than to be able to breathe normally again. It's hard to smile and it's hard to concentrate. All that you want is to be able to do the things that came so easily before, yet it feels like those things are not possible without that person in your life. It's not an unbearable physical pain, but it's mentally stressing and discomforting. It's possibly a pain worse than any other...the realization that you may never see someone again, or that they don't care for you anymore."
Isn't that exactly how it felt when Melissa left you Steve?
It wasn't so hard to say for me...


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1 posted 2000-10-30 07:39 PM



  Hey. This was great...tough stuff though..so yeah.. stay cool and keep it up... don't worry, be happy....

   ~carly


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Erin
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2 posted 2000-10-30 07:58 PM


I have one word for you: AMAZING!!!Thanks for sharing this...I hope to see more work by you!!!

~*Love is sometimes like a rose. Beautiful in the beginning but dies in the end.*~

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3 posted 2000-10-30 09:39 PM


This was amazing.......but i think it belongs a bit more in the prose section. NO harm done though....great job and post more.




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sweetstuff101
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4 posted 2000-10-30 09:54 PM


that was amazing!! I really liked it!! Keep up the great work, look forward to reading more soon!!

Luv,
  Sweetstuff
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Lakewalker
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5 posted 2000-10-31 02:45 PM


This poem is full of very good thoughts.  I think you're wanting to help shows that you really care and I hope Steve sees this.  Good job on this one

"And you still don't understand it, even though she's moved on
But maybe I can help you out, help you put it into words"


"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!!

Isabel Galaxia
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6 posted 2000-10-31 07:10 PM


That was great, I am extremely impressed.  HE SHOULD SEE THIS!!!  I'm sorry that's what you're going through....not sure what else to tell you, but good job, keep it up and smile
Bel

keoni
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7 posted 2000-10-31 07:47 PM


This is really great. I know how this feels. Your line:

"It feels weird to breathe whenever I just think of your name. It's restricting and compressing and you want nothing more than to be able to breathe normally again."
  
made me feel this exact same way the moment I read it. I hate this feeling. I enjoyed this very much, although it does resurface issues that I hate.
                                   Keoni

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